User talk:KBrill11/sandbox

Peer Review

1. "to characterize a somewhat recently established cluster of architectural approaches, particularly in Europe"- The use of the term "somewhat" is a little confusing, might be better to include a historical context for this? The link for the second citation also does not work.
2. "Well received by modernist architects the use of beton brut was popularized leading to the creation of the brutalist architecture style which thrived in the 1950s-1970's."- Is there a source for this?
3. "Brutalism was a design philosophy, not a style."- This sounds more like a critique rather than a neutral fact about the topic.
4. "Wood-imprinted concrete is still very popular in landscaping especially in some of the western European countries."- There was no mention of what "wood-imprinted concrete" is before this was introduced.
5. Is Béton brut a material? From the history part it sounded more like an idea while the fabrication part makes it clear that it's a material, might be better to clarify the definition more in the beginning of the article.
6. Are the images credited?

— Preceding unsigned comment added by Xo Fried Lobster (talk • contribs) 22:59, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

Instructor comments

This is a significant expansion of this article, and I like that you're experimenting with different features such as the gallery. Your peer reviewer has made some very good points, especially the one about clarifying whether béton brut is considered a material, a mode of architectural expression, or something else (assuming there's general agreement about this, or stating as much if there's not). I don't think it's necessary to credit images linked to Commons uploads, though. A few other suggestions:

• Where there are multiple terms meaning the same thing, all of the alternative terms could be listed at the first instance (e.g., board forming, board shuttering, wood-imprinted, etc.), but then one preferred term should be used consistently after that.
• Consider reordering the sentences of the Fabrication section to walk the reader from more general to more specific.
• Wikilink to the formwork article.
• Debug the citation templates.

Elizabeth Linden Rahway (talk) 11:11, 5 December 2018 (UTC)