User talk:KosherSalt21/sandbox

I was unable to verify some of the figures on the house values from the citations posted some of the spelling needs to be edited. I also think the racial distribution and housing information could go under a demographics header. You should try and search in newspapers and books for more information about Camdens demographicsBeast3020 (talk) 04:20, 17 April 2019 (UTC)-[reply]

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A couple of statements are lacking a source, specifically the paragraph directly under the geography heading. The second sentence of the "Housing Information" section could also be re-structured since low income might not be seen as directly correlated with neighborhood blight. In the "Racial Distribution" section, perhaps a "at this time" could be added in since that demographic data is subject to change when the next census completed and published. In terms of subjects that could be used to expand the page, a history section would be on the top of the list. A map of the area could be a nice piece of media to place in the infobox. Glassknott (talk) 10:39, 17 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I think this is the great start to a page, and you were able to find some good information about N. Camden to get started. I am concerned, however, that there's not as much of it as is required. You're quite a bit below the required character count for this stage. The material that is there is generally well-written. I am concerned as well about the lack of sources for the project: right now you're really only pulling from one spot. In order for this to make it onto the main space you're going to have to diversify. There's a lot of potential here, but this project still feels as if it's in its very early stages. Colbuendia71 (talk) 20:50, 25 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I also forgot to concur with one of your other readers: that first paragraph has got to have sources or else it won't be able to make it on the main space. Colbuendia71 (talk) 20:51, 25 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

peer review 2 I think that your paper is going along well and is coming along presentable. I see that you are having trouble in finding resources perhaps you can try books and newspapers about your topics. you can also add to North Camden's other aspects if you look at the wikis of other smaller neighborhood they have different topics you could use like land marks, or geography. Also it might be time to look at other Wikipedia pages that interest you to get your character count up if you are struggling with the page. --Beast3020 (talk) 14:08, 1 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

There's a lot of good information on this page, and the language is coming along as well. I do have some concerns about sourcing: at one point, you use Wikipedia itself as a source, which isn't allowed. What you could do is go to the page being referenced and use their sources on your own page, but Wikipedia isn't a valid source for a Wikipedia article. You should, however, look for places to link from one article to another. I also think a greater number of sources would be good: for example, the information about the fire was almost certainly published in the Courier Post as well, so you could use that to bolster your research about that topic. Colbuendia71 (talk) 18:24, 2 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]