User talk:Krystal Structure/sandbox
Kyra Dvorak Peer Review
[edit]The content, thus far, of this article is well written. It does a good job sounding like an encyclopedia article. However its organization is a bit confusing to me. I think that, if possible, you should try to find out a more about Fortey's background and add either an early life or background section in order to set the article up. Once this is found, I think it would also make more sense to add the Catholic section after the background section since it begins with information from when Fortey was young (16 years old). Lastly, I think the lead section is done pretty well. It portrays important facts, but once the sections are finalized, make sure that the lead section outlines each section of the article in order to set it up. Therefore, more information on Fortey's background may need to be added to the lead section.
Response
[edit]Thanks for the feedback, Kyra! I appreciate the suggestion to move the information about her early life before the education section. I'll work on finding out more about her early life and make that edit! Krystal Structure (talk) 23:48, 14 February 2018 (UTC)