User talk:Lumesti
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I like that in your article, considering that the topic involves a lot of large words that would make it quite difficult for someone who is has not taking a science class, but you did good making it as understandable as possible.
Three things i would fix is first i would try and find a few more facts under epidemiology if possible, unless the one sentence is all that could be found given there is no direct cause for this condition. Another thing i would change is in the intro to your topic, as you did good making it understandable as possible there are a small handful of words you could highlight to redirect the reader to so that they could have a better understanding of the word. The last thing i would correct and it might just be a personal preference but you can make the paragraphs appear better instead of having so many new line starts and if you condense them appearance wise it would look nicer Shadihasan11 (talk) 17:56, 13 November 2022 (UTC)