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Hi! The only critique I have for you is related to your lead section. Your first two sentences are just listing items off, and it is very hard to read like that. If you just list places you may lose the readers attention, so I would suggest moving the second sentence somewhere else in the paragraph. If you have two lists they should at least be in separate places so that it is not overwhelming for those who are reading. You also used "etc" two times in your second sentence when you only need it there once. There was a grammatical error where you said, "one of the most spoken language," when it should be languages. Ideas for the next sections of your article could be location/geography, history, demography, culture, etc.

-Leah Chiorello