User talk:MelPav

Welcome![edit]

Welcome to Wikipedia, MelPav! Thank you for your contributions. I am DASonnenfeld and I have been editing Wikipedia for some time, so if you have any questions feel free to leave me a message on my talk page. You can also check out Wikipedia:Questions or type {{helpme}} at the bottom of this page. Here are some pages that you might find helpful:

Also, when you post on talk pages you should sign your name using four tildes (~~~~); that will automatically produce your username and the date. I hope you enjoy editing here and being a Wikipedian! DA Sonnenfeld (talk) 01:39, 6 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Teahouse Invitation[edit]

Hello! MelPav, you are invited to join other new editors and friendly hosts in the Teahouse. An awesome place to meet people, ask questions and learn more about Wikipedia. Please join us! Pharaoh of the Wizards (talk) 15:10, 10 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The Knickerbocker[edit]

Hi MelPav, I see that you have selected The Knickerbocker to work on for EST 495. That's great, and I hope it will prove to be an interesting and fruitful topic. When you are ready, a few things that you might consider doing: i) Assess the present quality and content of the article and post that assessment on the article's talk page. What are its strengths and weaknesses? What further developments/ improvements would be helpful in strengthening it? ii) Based on your assessment, you might also indicate on the talk page which aspects of article-improvement you intend to be working on in coming weeks. iii) You might solicit suggestions on the above from other editors... Kind regards, DA Sonnenfeld (talk) 10:40, 27 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Good start, thanks! Regards, DA Sonnenfeld (talk) 15:29, 27 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hi MelPav, Thanks for the message. Looking good! Where are you thinking of going from there? If you have not done so already, I would suggest using the sandbox subpage associated with your UserID. That can be accessed by others, as well. Later when you're ready, you could also post a note on the talk page for The Knickerbocker, inviting comments and suggestions from any editor who is tracking that article. DA Sonnenfeld (talk) 00:58, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Very good. Now that you have a sandbox subpage you can remove the related material from your talk page. BTW, you'll see that I added an 'infobox' to The Knickerbocker. These are a regular feature of good articles in Wikipedia. Feel free to add to the infobox as you think appropriate. Happy editing! DA Sonnenfeld (talk) 09:16, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

P.S. I added a parameter (your username) to the My sandbox template on your user page to direct other editors to your sandbox. No need to include your signature on your user page; you may remove that... Kind regards, DA Sonnenfeld (talk) 09:39, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hi MelPav, The article is looking very good! Along with your request for a peer review, I'd recommend working up a short summary of the changes & additions that you have made to the article since the beginning of the semester; also perhaps a list of suggestions for further article development. Thanks & Kind regards, DA Sonnenfeld (talk) 19:01, 3 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for adding the summary of your contributions to The Knickerbocker. Great job! Let me know if you plan further work on the article this semester; otherwise I will set the student course project flag to 'completed'. Kind regards, DA Sonnenfeld (talk) 14:29, 7 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! I am quite satisfied with the progress I've made, and I don't believe I will have time to add anything else to the Knickerbocker this semester, but I will definitely continue contributing to Wikipedia in the future. This has been a great experience! 50.30.232.233 (talk) 18:08, 7 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

On behalf of those who will benefit from your contributions, thank you! I will mark the project as ended. Kind regards, DA Sonnenfeld (talk) 20:35, 7 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

notes[edit]

Feedback on your additions[edit]

Hi MelPav. You asked for some feedback on The Knickerbocker, so ... excellent work. Your additions are well-cited, read well, and have significantly improved the article. Two points for potential improvement if you plan on further edits:

Intro, or "lead" section: This should be re-written as a summary of the article. See WP:LEAD Right now, it may be turning away readers before they get to your new content. The list of former names could be incorporated with a ...
"Name" section: you have 1/2 paragraphs on the name, combine this with the list of former names for a better organised article.
"Impact" section begins with a long quote - this should be attributed to whoever made it in the text to avoid confusing readers.

Otherwise, great work! The Interior (Talk) 20:34, 4 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

A cup of tea for you![edit]

Great work on The Knickerbocker! Happy editing... Regards, DA Sonnenfeld (talk) 11:43, 21 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]