User talk:Mseyed.d/sandbox

- I really like the intro you wrote, especially as compared to the intro on the stub version of this page.

- In general (and I know this is the first draft so this might be totally irrelevant), your sentences tend to be pretty long. If it were me, I'd try to split up a few of the sentences so it flows a bit better.

- I like how your sections are split up. The breaks are very intuitive and help me understand the topic of the article even before reading all the text

Overall I think this is a really great start!

Temie's Peer Review

The best part is that your article starts with a Very clear introduction and historical clarification of what the subject matter is about. All the points you have are good enough for a first draft. Another strong side, it seems to me that you stated the major historical facts related to the topic although I might lack sufficient knowledge on the topic to conclude that. It is great that you connected the story of the past with the present and I am sure you are working on enriching the historical content in between. Temie (talk) 08:53, 10 April 2019 (UTC)