User talk:Mychelles/sandbox
Hey! I love your topic... you seem very passionate about it. You're definitely on the right path. You have good ideas on what you would like to add and where you want to go with your contribution. But, have you written a word-for-word outline of exactly what you think you are going to say? That would make it a lot easier for you to get feedback that you will be able to use...someone (like myself) could tell you exactly what to add or take away. So, I would just say write up exactly what you would like to say (INCLUDE YOUR CITATIONS), get someone to then edit that, and you should be good! But, I think you're on the right track.
Peer review[edit]
This is an amazing job. You really seem to be interested in your topic, so much that it caught my attention. You used a well rounded form of sources which is great. I do however, think that some of your sources can use a little bit of editing to make sure they are correct. Also, you don't necessarily have to say what you'll be doing. It somewhat confused me on if this was a part of the actual contribution or just a mental note. but either way, I can tell that this is going to be a great piece. Teresachiyannebeamon (talk) 02:17, 4 November 2017 (UTC)
Peer Edit[edit]
Hi, Mychelles. First off, you chose a great topic to add to since it is very controversial. When I first began reading I did notice a few spelling errors, but other than that your grammar and spelling is fine. Since this is still a big deal, try to have some recent accounts and examples to use for your contribution to be more credible. Since some of the examples and cases such as Roe v. Wade are sort of 'outdated', readers may ask why does it still matter. I like how you have some statistics, but try to find a few more specifically on black women compared to other races and why those statistics are as they are. I wish you the best of luck on the remainder of your contribution. Vonney25 (talk) 07:20, 9 November 2017 (UTC)