User talk:Nkmerr28/sandbox

- Suggest condensing the locations down to a region and maybe a few states. In the first sentence, it already states where this type of tree grows, I do not know if it is necessary to expand so much later on in the next section ForestGreenSweater (talk) 14:53, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

review[edit]

Introduction

"found from Maine south to Georgia" change "Maine south" to southern Maine"
"Because of their large north-south range, the trees are associated with a wide variety other wetland species." Flip both clauses of the sentence so that you don't start the sentence with a conjunction.

Distribution and habitat - things i would change

No need to list all states, geographical locations could be consolidated into general regions while emphasizing that they are located along coastal lands
add historical section, how they ended up where they are now would make a nice transition into this section
remove geographical locations of wildlife refuges if you link to them

I would also review any grammatical mistakes in other section that i might have missed

RemyLukeBirnbaum (talk) 15:20, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Grammar of the following sentence could be improved (two verbs in one sentence) "...is a species of Chamaecyparis, native to the Atlantic coast of North America is found from Maine south to Georgia..." Truong.ci (talk) 15:23, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]