User talk:O'DwyerC/sandbox

This article is well on its way as it is right now; it's already a big improvement over the current live wiki page. There are some improvements that could be made to make the article a bit easier to use, though.

-It may be worth creating a diagram of a coil/cantilever beam arrangement. The current description isnt very thorough, although more text discussing these arrangements might be out of place in the article -the wording in the first sentence of the electromagnetic generator applications section should be reworded. It's engfish-ey and/or written for a higher reading level than appropriate for wikipedia. -a minor thing, but I dont really see why "university of Southhampton" and "northwestern university" are linked in right now. Those pages don't really have any extra information that is relevant to your article. -consider reorganizing the Generator "applications" section into a research and future applications headings. Currently, the last sentence of that section is very out of place in the context of what is said before it. -I would personally start the Piezo "applications" section with a more broad description of applications for piezo generators. Jumping straight into the current specific examples makes it feel like Im missing background information as a reader. -Just generally, look to simplify your syntax/sentence structure. I feel that the reading level is currently around upper high school/lower college level. Should be more on the lower high school level.

Good Start though! the information and citations look solid to me, the article just needs some reorganization and fine tuning language-wise.

Evan Maunders