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Rouen Evaluations

4/24/2019 Evaluation by Afackrell

Afackrell (talk) 07:37, 24 April 2019 (EST)

• Points: 36.5
• Grade: 80%

Spelling/Grammar

Standard? You use past tense for the cathedral which is still standing. Not sure if you mean to do this referring to the old building and restorations but I believe “Rouen Cathedral ‘WAS’ a large and complex building that ‘WAS’ the product of” should be replaced with “is”. There are a couple of other places similar throughout the writing. I believe there is also a random “10” after “Roulland le Roux” and quotation marks after “stylistic modes”. The second section has random numbers and punctuation as well and is missing spaces and the T in “the”. This could have been imputed into some sort of spell check before being reviewed...

Language

Does Not Meet Standard The last sentence in Main Sights could be rephrased. I am confused by the "ornate gilt Renaissance clock” sentence. If it is a quote, maybe it could be rephrased in your own words. Also the opinion, “this really is a beautiful clock and area to behold” should be excluded or somehow backed with evidence. “In the late 1800s, there was a sudden revival to maintain their old landmarks. Because of this, Rouen” seems to be a run on. Combine them or start the second sentence differently.

Organization

Meets Standard

Coding

Exceeds Standard

Validity

Nearly Meets Standard Information looks accurately accredited but some claims should not be made as they can’t be proven. “this really is a beautiful clock and area to behold” and some other opinion like statements could be improved. This would also help with the language portion and make it more similar to an encyclopedia.

Completion

Exceeds Standard Good and balanced information added.

Relevance

Nearly Meets Standard I believe some of the content in the second section about the clock is lacking relevance.

Sources

Exceeds Standard High-quality citations.

Citations

Exceeds Standard Present and in perfect notation format.

References

Exceeds Standard Present and in a perfect pre-defined format.

4/23/2019 Evaluation by Gabbym9903

• Points: 38.5/40
• Grade: 96.25%

Spelling/Grammar

Exceeds Expectations I did not find any spelling or grammar mistakes.

Language

Needs Improvement The language of the post is overall good but I would recommend less quotations so that it sounds more like an encyclopedia rather than an article.

Organization

Needs improvement. I would recommend splitting these 2 paragraphs into more with 5-6 sentences each.

Coding

Meets Expectations The coding looks good and the structure of the information is well-maintained.

Validity

Meets expectations The sources you have used seem accurate and the information is well-presented.

Completion

Exceeds expectations You have included a lot of information and it is presented in an engaging way, making your post complete.

Relevance

Exceeds expectations All the information included is accurate and relevant to the topic and it flows well with the Wikipedia page.

Sources

Meets Expectations All sources are academic and trustworthy.

Citations

Needs Improvement The citations that are present are where they are supposed to be, however it seems like they need to be added to more sentences as there is more information out of what you have included that refers to the sources you have used.

References

Meets expectations All four citations look good, the format is the same. I would only recommend that you remove the parenthesis surrounding the fourth reference.

5/4/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright

DrMichaelWright (talk) 12:50, 4 May 2019 (UTC)

It seems you are making errors which you would not have done, had you been paying close attention to the WikiEdu modules. However, you do not appear on my WikiEdu list, making me wonder if you have even been using that engine at all.

• Points: 32.5/40
• Grade: 81.25%

Spelling/Grammar

Does not meet standard.

• "In the late 1800's there,..." No apostrophe: 1800s. It is plural, not possessive.
• "...where it's architecture..." No apostrophe: its. In this case, the possessive does not use an apostrophe. It's is ALWAYS a contraction of 'it is'.
• "in 1889 the project..." This direct quote (which should not be used to begin with) begins without a capital letter.
• There are numbers, strangely appearing in places in the text. Are these citations in the original text that you lifted?
• "...restoration.he project..." Seems to be missing a space and capital 'T'.

Language

Does not meet standard.

• As Audrey pointed out, above, there is opinionated language. Wikipedia needs to remain factual.
• "...to figure out..." is informal language
• "...this cathedral has a little bit from over 300 years of architecture." Informal and unclear language.

Organization

Meets standard. With (now) two large paragraphs about two dominant sights in Rouen, it would be great to have headers for them, so that they appear in the page's table of contents.

Coding

Nearly meets standard. Two of the references are created with template code (without a template identified), rather than simply using the citation engine native to Wikipedia.

Validity

Meets standard.

Completion

Does not meet standard. Large sections of text were copied and pasted from the source articles, rather than paraphrased, according to the WikiEdu instructions. Given that those texts were written in different contexts with different purposes, their language does not match the needs of Wikipedia. Reforming that language into your own fitting language is part of this complete project.

Relevance

Meets standard.

Sources

Exceeds standard. Two of these are really wonderful sources, while the New York Times is acceptable enough. They just need to be properly used.

Citations

Meets standard. Notes 3 and 4 should not be separated from the ends of their sentences by a space.

References

Nearly meets standard. The references should be somewhat reformatted, or - better - Wikipedia's citation engine properly used, which would also solve your coding problem.

Valencia Evaluations

5/17/2019 Evaluation by afackrell

afackrell (talk) 20:40, 17 May 2019 (PST)

• Points: 33/40
• Grade: 82%

Spelling/Grammar

Nearly meets standard. You are missing a space in between "Africa.Most" I belive some of the "i"'s in the second paragraph should be capatalized. Also, magnificent is misspelled.

Language

Nearly meets standard. I believe we are to avoid long quotes. You have a pretty legthy one in the first pargraph that could be paraphrased and quoted.

Organization

Meets standard. Good paragraphs and headers.

Coding

Meets standard.

Validity

Meets standard.

Completion

Does not meet standard. Your legth of information meets the requirement but you only have 8/10 sources.

Relevance

Meets standard.

Sources

Does not meet standard. Your citations look good but you need two more.

Citations

Mets standard.

References

Nearly meets standard. All sources seem of quality except possibly number 5. Maybe you could see if they referenced anyone and use their sources.

6/6/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright

DrMichaelWright (talk) 11:18, 7 June 2019 (UTC)

• Points: 27/40
• Grade: 67.5%

Spelling/Grammar

Nearly meets standard.

• "...the Moriscos were truly..." Since you're talking about something in the past before something else in the past, you need to use the perfect past, rather than the simple past.
• "...The late 1600's left..." omit apostrophe. This is plural, not possessive.
• "... heir, and..." Omit comma.
• "...Vallavecchia, wanted the..." Omit comma.
• "...University Pres." Press is misspelled.

Language

Does not meet standard.

• "...the king justified..." which king?
• "Although ... Spain." Large block quotes are out of place on Wikipedia. This was covered in the tutorial.
• "They were concentrated..." While this is not your text, by putting a segment about Jews in between it and a segment about Moriscos, you are suggesting that 'they' refers to Jews rather than Moriscos.
• "...and dodgy lines..." Dodgy is a bit of a dodgy term for using in an encyclopedia. Try a more formal word instead.
• "...much growth during this time in the textile industry." This reads a little awkwardly. Maybe "much growth in the textile industry during this time."
• "...shows the magnificent elegance..." non-neutral language.

Organization

Meets standard.

Coding

Meets standard.

• Though it would have been helpful if you marked your additions in bold so that I could more easily discern what you did.

Validity

standard?

• "...and the onset of the Black Death,..." The Black Death was a 14th century affair. This section is about the 17th century.
• "...The late 1600's left Valencia with a population decline to 6 million..." Valencia had a population of 6 million in the late 1600s??!!!
• "...the Nueva Planta decrees ... which were signed January 1716." There were a number of decrees. Only the last of them was issued on that date.

Completion

Does not meet standard. There is not quite as much text added as I would have hoped for, and you are two references shy of the requirement.

Relevance

Does not meet standard.

• Many of your additions do not deal with Valencia specifically. They provide general context.
• Some of your text and image additions regards the Palau de Justícia in Barcelona, which is in Barcelona, and was built in the 19th century.

Sources

Does not meets standard.

• There are only 8 out of the required 10 sources.
• The Kehillat source has a 404 link, but its parent website belongs to a Jewish congregation in Michigan. I can't tell if it's a legitimate source or not, but it is clearly not an academic peer-reviewed journal. Furthermore, the statement it supports about the Balck Death suggests that you may be mistaking what it was saying, unless it was mistaken about what it was saying.
• Page 49 of the Ruiz book does not say anything about Valencia's population decline.
• Page 229 of the Vives book does mention the Taula de Canvi, but not its bankruptcy in 1613. It is referring to 14th and 15th century things.
• At this point, I'm not going to waste my time verifying the others.

Citations

Meets standard.

• You occasionally leave a space between the period at the end of a sentence and the citation note that supports it. There should be no such space. A style guide for how to do so can be seen here.

References

Nearly meets standard.

• The Jónsson article is officially published in a journal. It should therefore also be properly referenced as such.
• The Vives reference says it does not have a location. The name of the publisher itself is quite the clue.
• The 2017 edition of Ruiz was published by Routledge in New York. T&F is merely the online database that houses the ebook version of it.
• Do not use ALLCAPS in your references, unless it is an acronym.
• There is a usable copyright date on the spanishwars.net web page.
• Using the proper reference code would have cut down on the long ugly URLs.
• Lack of proper italics in references.