User talk:Paigejohnston

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Hello, Paigejohnston, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:14, 24 January 2019 (UTC)

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Hi, I saw that you moved your article live, so I have some notes for you:

• I fixed the article as far as general formatting goes. Headers shouldn't be bolded and citations need to be in-line. I've done this for you.
• I removed the conclusion section as well as the general mentions of this being a paper, as this doesn't fit Wikipedia's style guidelines. Keep in mind that this isn't meant to be an academic paper so the format and layout will be very different.
• This needs more non-primary sources to help establish notability and back up claims. These should be from places that aren't affiliated with the ASC. For example, "Aboriginal+Sport+Circle"&hl=en&sa=X&ved=0ahUKEwjv7dDayKDhAhVRo1kKHZZsBtUQ6AEINDAB#v=onepage&q="Aboriginal%20Sport%20Circle"&f=false this book makes for an excellent source since it does cover the ASC in several places in the book and is also put out by an academic book publisher. This is also a good source.
• The article has some tone issues. I've dealt with these a little but they still need to be reviewed. Make sure that you attribute claims - for example, we can't say that the ASC shows a specific value. We can say that this is how they say that they will show this value, but stating that they absolutely do can be seen as original research and a subjective statement, as opinions may differ - even if it seems clear that they do.

I hope that this all helps! I think that you chose a great topic and it's honestly really surprising that this organization didn't have an article already, so you've done a good thing by creating it! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:02, 26 March 2019 (UTC)