User talk:Peterson.moll
Overall a good start; very comprehensive. Makes good use of visuals, but it could always use more, maybe photos from actual natural disasters.
The Red Cross quote in "Social Work Defined" could be presented in a list format to make it easier to read.
"Social Work Defined" could be changed to "Chronological Targets in Social Work" because social work is already defined in the first few lines of the article. This section doesn't define social work but rather outlines stages in responding to a disaster.
"Community Outreach" should be expanded. You could expand by explaining: 1- why it's underestimated 2- how it can help the individual's recovery 3- how it can help the community's recovery
You should provide what CPR stands for before shortening it to an acronym, as in: "Cardiopulmonary resuscitation (CPR)"
In "Qualifications," I think you should explain what these qualifications are, rather than to refer the reader to other resources. For example, do you need a Bachelor's or Master's degree in social work?
Let me know if anything is unclear!
MUpsych (talk) 22:05, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
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Peer Edit - From Rebecca
[edit]Great start, Molly! It looks like you've already made a ton of progress.
• I think you can do without "defined" in the titles for Social Work and Natural Disaster. It will be clear that you are defining the terms in the text.
• The "Social Work Defined" section could be renamed since it is actually discussing more about stages of social work response when a disaster occurs.
• The last two paragraphs in the "Practice" section are a bit wordy. I would suggest adjusting the tone of your sentences and making the point of each sentence more concise.
• "Community Outreach" could you expansion (which I'm sure you already are planning on doing!)
• The formatting of the citations 10-12 has each link has it's own separate line, as opposed to having them next to each other with citation 9.
Iamastudent (talk) 12:47, 29 March 2016 (UTC)
PEER EDIT #2 - Rebecca
[edit]- The organization of "Targets of Social Work" is great. Putting the four stages on separate lines is helpful for the reader.
- "Community Outreach" could still be enhanced. Are their any examples of community outreach social work? If not, what would be the benefit?
- "Community outreach is neglected in the thoughts of disaster recovery." The wording in the bolded portion of this sentence is confusing.
- "This training, along with social workers' skills in navigating complex systems of care for their clients, makes the social work profession uniquely qualified to work with communities, and after disasters to help ensure the health of the community and individuals within it." The end of this sentence does not make sense.
- "Social workers must also have knowledge of the systems and institutions in the community in order to work within and against the systems as necessary." What are the systems?
- The citations for 10, 11, and 12 are still on separate lines.
Iamastudent (talk) 00:56, 5 April 2016 (UTC)
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