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https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Murder_By_Magic — Preceding unsigned comment added by Princessti (talk • contribs) 15:55, 26 October 2015 (UTC)
Cassada, Jackie. "Murder By Magic: Twenty Tales Of Crime And The Supernatural (Book)." Library Journal 129.15 (2004): 52. Literary Reference Center. Web. 25 Oct. 2015.
This citation recognizes that Rosemary Edghill edited the novels. ````
Pitt, David. "Murder By Magic: Twenty Tales Of Crime And The Supernatural (Book)." Booklist 101.3 (2004): 314. Literary Reference Center. Web. 25 Oct. 2015. This citation states that Carole Nelson Douglas writes a piece of the material. ````
Pitt, David. "Murder By Magic: Twenty Tales Of Crime And The Supernatural (Book)." Booklist 101.3 (2004): 314. Literary Reference Center. Web. 25 Oct. 2015. This citation refers to Laura Resnik's tale Dopplegangster. ````
"MURDER BY MAGIC: Twenty Tales Of Crime And The Supernatural (Book)." Publishers Weekly 251.36 (2004): 50-51. Academic Search Complete. Web. 25 Oct. 2015. This citation acknowledges Teresa Edgerton's murder tale. ````
- You only have three sources. You can, of course, cite from a single source more than once, but you also need to find another source. Josef Horáček (talk) 16:39, 1 November 2015 (UTC)
- To find out how to link two citations to one reference, read this: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Help:Referencing_for_beginners. Josef Horáček (talk) 21:22, 3 November 2015 (UTC)
The Lead[edit]
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sexual_abuse_cases_in_Galway,_Kilmacduagh_and_Kilfenora_diocese Provided a lead section for this article.````
- You should start a new header for each new conversation topics. I fixed it for you. Josef Horáček (talk) 16:39, 1 November 2015 (UTC)
- Your leads needs a bit of work. First of all, most of it should be in the past tense, and you should include dates throughout. Secondly, you need to get rid of emotional language - the exclamation point, or the phrase "fight for their freedom." Josef Horáček (talk) 16:14, 2 November 2015 (UTC)
- The revision is a lot better. The first sentence also needs a date, though. When did the cases skyrocket? In 2005? Find the info in the article. Or perhaps you should find another opening. For example, "There have been several/many cases of child abuse by priests in ... over the last half century." Then order the rest of your sentences chronologically. Josef Horáček (talk) 03:25, 3 November 2015 (UTC)
- You should post the lead. Josef Horáček (talk) 17:00, 10 November 2015 (UTC)
- The revision is a lot better. The first sentence also needs a date, though. When did the cases skyrocket? In 2005? Find the info in the article. Or perhaps you should find another opening. For example, "There have been several/many cases of child abuse by priests in ... over the last half century." Then order the rest of your sentences chronologically. Josef Horáček (talk) 03:25, 3 November 2015 (UTC)
- Your leads needs a bit of work. First of all, most of it should be in the past tense, and you should include dates throughout. Secondly, you need to get rid of emotional language - the exclamation point, or the phrase "fight for their freedom." Josef Horáček (talk) 16:14, 2 November 2015 (UTC)