User talk:Rdavi107/sandbox

I agree with Shalor, this is well done. You need more sourcing. I don't think that should be that difficult. I quick search reveals a number of newspaper stories on the topic including https://www.minnpost.com/minnesota-blog-cabin/2013/01/intrigue-and-violence-twin-cities-food-co-op-scene. You might also see what pictures or video footage might be available to include in your article. Finally, you might connect to some of the other articles in wikipedia on food coops or coops more generally. Mcassell04 (talk) 16:06, 14 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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Hi Rdavi107, Lorealhawk, what you have here really is nicely laid out. The only thing I have note-wise at this point is that it needs more sourcing to show a better depth of coverage. I found this, but I'm not sure if it pertains to this topic since it's more about a recent store. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:39, 6 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Rdavi107, Lorealhawk, Jdicke16, what you have here looks ready to post - this needs more sourcing, but I think that it has enough to establish notability guidelines and it being live will hopefully encourage others to add as well. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:55, 27 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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Hi! I think you did a really nice job laying out your information and did well to use the format that wikipedia has laid out for you. I do want to point a few grammatical mistakes, a missing comma or an extra space here and there, but nothing terrible. My only critique is that you maybe explore and give a small description when you reference something. For example, you mentioned the black panther party. But, how am I supposed to know what that is? A little background could go a long way. Other then that, it was good!

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Hi! I think this is a very interesting article on a topic I had never heard of! I think you did a good job with the layout of the article. It could use more background information and added depth on the background provided. Additionally, it could be interesting to show the local and national economic impact of the event. Katiejust16 (talk) 00:00, 13 October 2017 (UTC)katiejust16[reply]