User talk:Rita Butrus/sandbox

Hi Rita! Good looking article. You have lots of sources that back up the claims you make and most of the information in your article appears to be very factual and unbiased.

I recommend adding subheadings to your article in order to make it clearer to understand exactly what each section is about. Your article feels just a little unorganized to me and I think subheadings would really help! Also, one of the last lines of your article states:

"The practice of meditating and having a skilled mind itself forbids violence. One who is mindful and has control over his selfish desires will not associate with violence."

This last sentence seems biased to me. Unless you're pulling it from a source to express a topic or a certain viewpoint, I would recommend removing it.

Other than that, great job with your encyclopedic diction and great quality in content! Yaz.17 (talk) 21:28, 19 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Rita,

I enjoyed the content of your article evaluation and I thought that you supported your claims with compelling evidence.

Aside from the content, I feel that the structure of your work could be improved upon a little. I would suggest adding headings with your main topics, for example, when including background information you could use "Origin" as your heading. It might also help organize things up a bit by adding sub-headings as well. These are great when talking about the same subject, meanwhile including differences or unique qualities between these topics. For example, one possible heading can state "Buddhist Violence" and your sub-headings could include "Violence Against Christians and Muslims" or the second could talk about "Post War Sri Lanka and Its Impact on Buddhist Extremists".

Other than organization of your ideas, I believe you did an awesome job! :)Ericneumann 99 (talk) 02:15, 20 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]