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Thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia! A412 (Talk • C) 05:13, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Article review[edit]

Robin’s article is certainly pertinent to current US health care policy, and I truly hope she will be able to get the article approved. However, it is true that there are some inherent problems with the way the article is written. For example, the statistics section is very choppy and difficult to absorb. While it is written out quite simply, the inclusion of so much differing information in a small section of the article makes it challenging to determine what is truly pertinent to the issue and what is not. I would suggest touching only on statistics that you plan on expanding.

Another issue is the huge lack of sources. One of the reasons Wikipedia can actually be a reliable source is because of the widespread use of citations. However, your whole article only has ten sources, and most sentences are not sourced. I would go back and source literally every sentence. When you do this, you will be able to see how the initial source, presumably a neutral scholarly article or research paper, was written, which will help you steer away from ‘essay writing’ and remaining unbiased. More sources also provide differing stances on the issue, which will give you even more material to work with an fewer ‘filler’ sentences.

Finally, the article needs some general grammatical work to make it more professional and reliable. The sentences are very short and in quick succession which is not easy to read. The paragraphs can also be split up to look a little less intimidating. Also, any time you list something, I’d suggest putting in bulleted format, which leads to less filler words and editorializing.

All in all, it’s a great article. There’s no reason that with a little more work it shouldn’t be approved.

Ellyhutch (talk) 22:38, 29 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Continuing Edits[edit]

Elly, thanks for all your comments. It definitely is very choppy right now as I took out a lot of information to try and make it extremely neutral. I will definitely add in more sources, I have a lot more, and will continue to make readability better. If anyone else has suggestions for re-organization or places to cut or expand please let me know.

Robinkvest (talk) 00:17, 30 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Article review[edit]

For being a brand-new article, I think it does a quality job of displaying a comprehensive presentation of the subject. The definition and demographics of CSHCN is clearly laid out in the second section, and I think including the section on government programs gives the subject credibility because it is obviously relavant to health care in the U.S. if it falls under the umbrella of Medicaid and other programs and mandates. The section on 'Transition to adult healthcare' also benefits the comprehensiveness of the article, for children with special health care needs must go somewhere when they aren't children anymore.

The article also draws from credible government sources, an important part of what makes an article fit for the wikipedia mainspace. I don't see the claim of it "sounding like an essay" to be a prohibitory factor from making it go live when it has reasonable source content and obviously factual information on a relavent subject to "human knowledge." Touch-ups are necessary, as with any article's page.

Lggernon (talk) 00:27, 30 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]


Article review[edit]

This article is definitely relevant and I can see its potential to become a great article. With the edits already made, it no longer reads like an essay but as stated before it's still pretty choppy and could use general revision. I can also see where the neutrality might be questionable. An easy fix for this is to state the studies from which some of the statistics come. For example, the sentence "CSHCN when compared to those children without SHCN face more inadequacies in healthcare, education, health of family, and maintaining a healthy lifestyle" could be changed to "According to the US Department of Health and Human Services, CSHCN when compared to those children without SHCN face more inadequacies in healthcare, education, health of family, and maintaining a healthy lifestyle." That way the sentence is shown as coming from a reputable statistical study.

Just as a general note, there are many places where you could add the main page for certain links (Main Article: _______); specifically, for the "Medicaid" and "Children's Health Insurance Programs" subsections.

Overall, this article is well done. It provides an exhaustive display of what CSHCN are and their placement within the United States health care system. Once some of these changes are made, the article should go live immediately. It is surprisingly that this topic didn't already exist in Wikipedia because it's such an important topic when considering the health care controversy. The recent addition of sources gives the article more credibility and neutrality, and the article can only get better from here.

Allisonshields (talk) 03:46, 30 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Article Review[edit]

I think that this is a wonderful topic that people should learn more about. Currently the article is in need of some edits. I can see why they claimed it to be "essay-like" and "unnuetral". However, the main issue is not content, but rather word choice. Some of the word choices indicate that you have an opinion about the content in one way or the other. However, this article is good, and with a little work should be worthy enough to be allowed to go live. This is a very important topic and this information should be made available to the general public so that they can be more informed. Especially since healthcare seems to be an important topic on the national agenda, it is important that all healthcare information be made available and easily accessible.

I made a few edits, and signed them. Feel free to accept or reject these changes. If you have any questions about any of them. Please contact me.Kdumelle13 (talk) 04:30, 30 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Edits[edit]

Thanks Kathia, the edits were very helpful and I appreciated the re-organization. I added more names of who did all the studies and will continue revising word choice.

Robinkvest (talk) 04:37, 30 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Article review[edit]

The article provides much information on a topic that involves many lives- particularly children. This article is off to a great start, and with just some edits, I believe that the article will be approved soon.

From what I see, I do not agree with the reason that the article reads more like an essay than an encyclopedia article. It contains various secondary articles, and I think it is organized well. As for edits, adding more information at the beginning of the article will be beneficial. Providing a basic overview on the importance of the topic will help readers to be introduced to the topic. Secondly, the use of acronyms disrupts the flow of the article. Using the full title instead of CSHCN will be effective in keeping the focus on the children. It seems like CSHCN is some sort of medicine or a medical condition particularly at the end of the article. Lastly, I recommend that citations be done for every sentence that provides statistics, facts, and any other statements from sources even if the source has already been cited in the same paragraph.

Taking the suggestions in this talk page into consideration while working on the article should boost the article to gain approval. It discusses an important issue especially with the current situation in the US. MinjKim (talk) 04:50, 30 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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