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Savannah's Peer Review

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Hi Savannah! I think that the International Cherry Blossom Festival is an awesome article to work on, especially because it is such a famous event! I reviewed the article and checked the Talk page to read what your contributions so far have been. This week, we learned that there are 5 elements to good Wiki articles. I would like to review those five elements and compare your chosen article to them.
The lead section is okay, in general. It gives some of the basic information about the Cherry Blossom Festival. It does mention that it is not affiliated with the National Cherry Blossom Festival, and while this is good information to know, I think it could be useful somewhere else in the article, perhaps in the History section? The heading mentions that the CBF is held in Macon, Georgia, but I feel that it should be more specific. Most of the activities are held in Central City Park, but that is not mentioned anywhere in the article. Perhaps you could add this in!
The second element of a good Wiki article is that there needs to be a clear structure. The article does include a History section, which provides great information! However, there is an Annual events and Other events section. I feel that is redundant and could be combined to create one section.
The third element is Balanced coverage within the article. I think the article does a well enough job giving a brief description of the history, and I also like that the article has a short description of the events, such as what they are and where exactly they are held.
The fourth element of a good Wikipedia article is one that displays neutral content. I do feel that this article displays this element throughout its' entirety.
The last element for a Wiki article is reliable sources. I reviewed each of the sources, and find that most of them came from books about the CBF or from the official website of CBF. There has been a lot of news coverage over the years, and I am surprised that there were no newspaper articles or reference to 13WMAZ or Channel 41 covering these events. I think that you have the opportunity to really make this article stand out! I wish you success on your journey throughout the rest of the semester! LynzeeWhite (talk) 15:39, 26 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review

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Hi Savannah. Hope your summer is going well. I'm really interested to see what you come up with for this article. I learned a lot about the Cherry Blossom festival growing up since we used to live on the cherry tree viewing route. I would suggest for the article to have a good balance to also include the significance the festival has on generating a large number of tourists that come from Japan. There is actually no mention of Japan in the article currently on Wikipedia, which is odd considering the Yoshino Cherry tree originates from Japan and a good chunk of tourists that visit during the festival are Japanese. I don't know if this is because we have so many trees or because of Macon's sister city of Kurobe in Japan[1]. Jkoplin1 (talk) 15:52, 29 June 2019 (UTC)Jkoplin1[reply]

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Hey Savannah, I think that the International Cherry Blossom Festival is pretty good choice. It’s well written, simple, and direct without any extraneous details. The article did good job carrying a steady and neutral tone throughout and made good use of subheadings to breakdown and structure its content. My few suggestions are to develop more references and citations as well add more content to the article. Honestly, I’ve read more about the Cherry Blossom that what was present. I also wish the article would place more attention on the Japanese connection. Ousainou Adeniyi (talk) 10:59, 29 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Book recommendation

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Hey Savannah! When I went to the library yesterday to find a book on the Rose Hill Cemetery (Macon, Georgia), I noticed a book on the International Cherry Blossom Festival by Ed Grisamore sitting right beside it. I didn't flip through it, but it looked like a good resource for your article (especially since Grisamore is known for his research on the ICBF.) It's at the Charles A. Lanford Library in the non-fiction section under 975.855, if you're interested. Not sure if you've run across this book in your research, but I figured it could be helpful. Best of luck! --Sara Kathryn 16:57, 3 July 2019 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cavaliergirl96 (talkcontribs)