User talk:Shy63
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Hello, Shy63, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:05, 30 September 2020 (UTC)
COM 482 Introduction[edit]
Hello! This is Angel from COM 482 Interpersonal Media. I'm just doing a short introduction here but I hope that you're having a good start to the new school year! Angelsu52 (talk) 14:21, 7 October 2020 (UTC)
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Welcome Shy63 to both Wikipedia and to COM482! I'm a big fan of takikomi gohan so it's exciting to see you work on that article.
The article is somewhat advanced compared to other stubs so you might need to dig a bit deeper to make significant improvements. Look at the talk page of the article (Talk:takikomi gohan) for related food projects that will give you a good sense of excellent articles on similar topics which should point you at a way to improve the article. I'm looking forward to seeing watching the article develop over the next week. —mako๛ 14:13, 19 October 2020 (UTC)
Feedback on your draft[edit]
Greetings Shy63! I'm sorry you didn't get feedback on User:Shy63/Takikomi gohan from any of your classmates.
In any case, I think you article is off to a great start. You've added tons of information, a bunch of good references, and the article is 'much better shape than it was before. Hooray!
Most of my advice is just about cleaning things up. In particular:
- Carefully edit it to try and polish the English.
- You've added a bunch of new statements/facts/etc about takikomi gohan. Each of these needs a reference! If they are coming from a single source, you can add it for the first claim or sentence and then add a second citation to the same thing.
- I saw that you added a citation to the History header. That's not really typical in Wikipedia.
- I would consider making maze gohan into a red link.
Once you've done a final pass to clean up some of this stuff, please go ahead and move your changes over into the live version. I think with another pass, you'll be in really great shape! This is great work. It's making me hungry! ;) —mako๛ 03:13, 2 November 2020 (UTC)