User talk:Somara S/sandbox
Hi Somara! Isha here. Here are all my edits below.
So for your first article about Andrés Sepúlveda, I think you did a good job in picking a person to write on since he ties to our in class discussions while also being relevant. I also like that while you don't have that much information, you have a plan for the information you plan to acquire. Here are my suggestions: 1. Find more, varied sources. Try to include information that calls for scholarly journals and credible news sources. 2. Add a section about the background of Latin America and its political sphere to allow readers to get a better understanding of the environment he lived in. This could also allow you to use more sources.
For your second article, here is my advice: 1. Even though another article exists on Estonia's E-Residency, you can still include brief background information on it, especially if it enriches the article. You can reference the other article as well. 2. Consider adding more than one section. 3. Include more and varied sources.
For the third article on Leapfrog Democracies, here's what I think: 1. For your lead, write not only a definition, but one or two sentences on some background knowledge. If you see other Wikipedia articles, they do this. In addition to a basic, fundamental definition, some information about a date of origin, or location is also included. Consider thinking along similar lines. 2. Think of more sections to add in addition to Tunisia and Iceland examples. Some ideas for additional sections are: --"Controversy Surrounding Leapfrog Democracies" --"Leapfrog Democracies Future Implications" --"Notable Leaders Who Have Endorsed Leapfrog Democracies"
Happy Writing! Hope my edits helped.
Ishapunja (talk) 05:53, 25 November 2016 (UTC)
Hello Somara!
So I reviewed your articles before realizing someone else did too, but here are my suggestions.
The additions to the articles seem to be well thought out. There are a couple of instances where you can either link a subject/point to another article or explain it a bit. For instance, in the first article where you mentioned the type of encryption that is used, you can source it or explain how "Secure" this...
For the Sepulveda article, see if you can provide what technical school he attended to be more specific, and if you can find the result of this investigation "Although Peña Nieto's government has denied election rigging allegations, a representative from the opposition party has requested an investigation by the National Electoral Institute.[6]"It would be interesting to see in the article.
In the last article, you should also spell out the acronyms if they arent already explained what it is, such as ICT (you can also link it to the wiki article on this)
Other than that, Isha made most of the other comments I was going to make. Essentially, you are finished, and have done an excellent job adding to these articles. Hopefully my edits made some sense! JoseLara (talk) 07:20, 29 November 2016 (UTC)