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Thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia! Excirial ^{(Contact me,Contribs)} 18:28, 12 July 2012 (UTC)

TKPBOK User/ 1st page for Ashley O'Connor Declined

Hi thank you for your help with this I was just curious how I can write a biography page and meet your neutral terms. I am open to suggestion..and very appreciated Thank you Ted — Preceding unsigned comment added by TKPBOK (talk • contribs) 19:39, 12 July 2012 (UTC)

Hiyas there TKPBOK,

There are actually multiple issues with the article, though the neutrality issue was the most prevelant troughout the article. For example, take the following lines:

• Ashley, along with business partners Stuart Stevens and Russell Schriefer, have brought some of the most prolific advertising to the political world over the past 15 years (Non neutral, advertising)
• Thru her first political cycle in the 1996 she learned that she had a passion and talent for production (Non neutral - also the statement doesn't add much to the article).
• Production Highlight's and the entire list of political credits. (Not exactly encyclopedic, and it makes the article looks like a resume).

Besides that there really shouldn't be any external links in the main article body. Those go in a specific external links section at the bottom of the page, if the links are relevant.

Another issue is that the text isn't supported by reliable sources. I see two references are included, but those are non-independant campaign sites (Considered not reliably), and don't even contain all the content stated in the article. For a so called BLP page (a biography of a living person) literally all content must be sourced with reliable sources, for the simple reason that anyone will be able to change the page content later on, and because incorrect of libelous information in a biography can have repercussions for the subject.

Besides these two there are some minor issues such as a need forwikification, a change of the sections in level 2 headers and some basic formatting stuff, but those don't tend to be show stoppers. I would advice looking in the good article section for a biography, and using that as an example for your own article. A Good article has been checked for its quality, and therefor serves as a very decent example for writing an article yourself. Excirial ^{(Contact me,Contribs)} 06:43, 13 July 2012 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation

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Thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia! David_FLXD (Talk) 07:50, 17 July 2012 (UTC)

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Thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia! Mephistophelian (contact) 18:08, 24 October 2012 (UTC)