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Very good road map for what is aheadRJBazell (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 21:06, 6 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Your article is full of great information! The statistics are very current and highlight how serious Mozambique's HIV/AIDS crisis is. I would consider changing the first sentence of your article because it reads as a little opinionated, and I would insert citations after more of your sentences (I think one citation every 2-3 sentences is considered ideal). That's not to say that you don't have enough sources, I just think you should indicate which sources were used a little more regularly. Overall excellent! Branfordbulldogs (talk) 18:40, 9 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]