User talk:Taedayvion312/Robert Fuller Mass Shooting Monroe, Lousiana 1960
Peer Review
[edit]1. What does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you?-
I really found it unfortunate how poor the mental health services were in the 1940s. Also, with his father in the KKK he was surrounded with hate from all directions. I also had no idea about the White Slave Act- I like how you put in a link so I could read more about it. I also found it crazy how the authorities did not take his crimes seriously- this is a good topic. It is crazy that the survivor of the shooting was arrested- really shows the racism of the south in an era which really was not that long ago. Shows the power of the KKK in the South
2. What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?
- I would add more to the end section- It seems like you had a sentence or two to add in there. Secondly, I would find some way to give an overview in the beginning for someone who just wants a quick overview of the event(s). I am also unsure if this was one mass shooting or multiple events. I think maybe finding a way to connect the events would be helpful to your reader. I also think you should find some info on the victims of the shootings. Especially if the survivor got arrested. It would interesting to see if he/she was still alive. The 1960s wasn't that long ago so it might be a possibility.
3- What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article? -
I would really focus on using more specific information-location/dates/people. I would also attempt to make your structure more clear. The quick read intro section before the background would be the best way to improve the article. Overall it seems like a good start. Some more detail would make it stronger for your reader.
4. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? -
I really like how clear your paraphrasing is, and I will try to put that into my paper. I like how you use the FBI witness text, which is a different and important angle. I want to try to put this into my paper. Overall I think this topic is very important and I have never heard of it before.
Sellis22 (talk) 04:23, 2 March 2024 (UTC)
Peer Review-Kidd
[edit]1. What does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you?
The article offers an in-depth history of Robert Fuller, paying special attention to his childhood, his service in the military, his involvement with illegal activity, and the historic mass killing. It does a good job presenting multiple perspectives on what happened, including Robert's story, eyewitness accounts, and what happened following the shooting. The article adds complexity to the historical setting of the development of the Ku Klux Klan and racial prejudice.
2. What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?
Source Clarification Although the article lists several sources, including FBI files, court transcripts, and witness statements, it may use additional references to these sources. This would improve the information's authenticity and help readers discover more about the subject if they want.
Extra thorough review While the article gives an in-depth overview of Fuller's life and the shooting, it could have benefited from additional research and understanding of the cultural, psychological, and historical elements that were involved. The historical account could gain depth if the larger consequences of Fuller's acts and their effects on the community were discussed
3. What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?
Making sure that reports are accurate and comprehensive would be the most significant improvement. This means verifying information, supporting witness statements, and offering in-depth analyses of the events surrounding Fuller's life and the shooting event. The article's credibility would be increased by providing accurate sources
4. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could apply to your article?
I may take inspiration for writing from this essay, especially in terms of giving a thorough overview of historical events and figures. It covers how crucial it is to keep accurate facts, add context, and incorporate a range of viewpoints. A clean and well-organized article structure also makes it easier for readers to read and engage with the content. Josiah-Kidd (talk) 03:40, 4 March 2024 (UTC)