User talk:Vpritchard/Foxhound

Hi! I'm reviewing your article User:Vpritchard. I did a evaluation where you can find here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Vpritchard/User:Vpritchard/Foxhound/Jfinlay8_Peer_Review

I liked the part that you added to the article it seems very relevant. One thing I'd do it just add more sections that relate because I think there's more you could add. Disposition is a bit underrepresented maybe you could add more there. Also changing the lead so it'll reflect more of what the whole article is about. Also you could review some of the sources like Blogs.pitch.com is probably not a great reliable source and you could get a strong one. Also there should be a citation after each section and the first one in respiratory disease doesn't have one. Jfinlay8 (talk) 03:07, 23 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Peer review and link to question sheet[edit]

Hey Victoria, I just completed the peer review question sheet and here is a link to it: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Vpritchard/User:Vpritchard/Foxhound/Bradyamcevoy_Peer_Review?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_peer_review

I think you have a strong article and could really just benefit from a little more organization in the opening paragraph, as well as some simplification of language throughout it!

Best, Bradyamcevoy (talk) 22:31, 23 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]