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peer review from Ryan Watts
[edit]The lead, or the introduction, really sets up the rest of the edit and it sets up a good structure that is followed throughout the entirety of the edit. I believe that he implemented a good structure, but I do believe the final sentence falls short of a decent conclusion. It sort of just ends and that's it. I am happy with the neutrality of the edit though, as he doesn't show any sort of bias towards the MSRT. The sources are very reliable based off my analysis on them and I believe overall it is a very balanced piece. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rjwatts21 (talk • contribs) 16:13, 19 November 2019 (UTC) Rjwatts21 (talk) 16:16, 19 November 2019 (UTC)
Peer Feedback
[edit]Explain more so how you are going to add your work into the page. You have very nice information but I do not think it is clear where you are going to add it on the page so if you could make that a little more clear that would make it a little better as well. For me to further edit your work I feel there needs to be a little more information as well added to the part you are editing. This has good and reliable sources so that is good. Also they do not pick a certain side so it is neutral. Also the structure of the part you are editing is good as well, stays in order and everything so that is good as well. Overall I feel this is a very good piece and will be great to put onto wikipedia. --Joemancini2 (talk) 16:31, 19 November 2019 (UTC)
peer review from Assem Selem
[edit]In the lead, he added more information about the Maritime Security Response Team (MSRT) and he made it specific and even added the time they were established, which is good information to add since the article never mentioned it, he organized the structure very well since he started with the time of the establishment before he goes in deep information. He added more information but not too many that it would be too much information. And the main thing he remained neutral and didn’t mention his opinion on if the (MSRT) should exist or not. His resources are reliable, but he could also mention some of their tactics to show why they’re so useful and why they’re so special. Also, he should mention some of their work and their operations to reinforce their idea that they are a successful and special group of the military which was mentioned in one of his articles --Assem Selem (talk) 19:27, 19 November 2019 (UTC)
Peer edit
[edit]Gourley, S. (2006). US Coast Guard creates primarily “offensive” counter-terrorism force. Jane’s Navy International, 111(5), 6. Retrieved from http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=mth&AN=21256364&site=ehost-live
Some of the sources used aren’t typically reliable, so I found a source using UAlbany’s database finder that talks about the founding of the Maritime Security Response Team. There isn’t much in the section to work with, but it appears neutral. Clearing up the acronyms was a good idea, as many acronyms are shared with multiple things, the MSRT itself being shared with a company in the stock market, a radio technology group, and many others. Figuring out how to set the acronyms to links to what the acronym is referring to is a good idea, and I recommend trying to figure out how to do that. --SetcherK (talk) 19:38, 19 November 2019 (UTC)
This article uses great sources. They are all reliable and strictly fact-based. The information you added also elaborates on the topic and is in alignment with the lead but you could give more attention to other aspects of the Coastguard. The information you added focused only on the MSRT. Your topic is on the Deployable Operations Group, the MSRT is only a part of this broad topic. You can expand on information under the “Port Security Units” heading and the “Tactical Law Enforcement Teams” heading. I would also make the lead more concise. You provided a lot of information. It is clear what your article is about. I would just make sure the information is balanced in the article. Great job picking the sources but I think you need to cite information you have in the article such as “Other specialized units and federal agencies that MSRTs routinely train with are the SEAL teams, SWCC, Helicopter Sea Combat Squadrons and EOD of the Navy, Maritime Raid Force of the Marine Corps, Special Mission Units, the Secret Service, FBI, the Border Patrol's BORTAC, and the Customs and Border Protection SRT. Their motto, as seen on their unit patch, is "Nox Noctis est Nostri", which translates to "The Night is Ours". Great start! ````