User talk:Zoensy/sandbox
HMB436 comment:
Hi - overall you have some good points on your fungus. I would recommend a few changes to your outline, with one of the more important issues being citations. Some facts are not properly sited on your article or the hyperlink is in the incorrect spot (in the middle of the sentence instead of after the sentence and fact). The introductory sentence needs a citation and the taxonomy section should not be a point (as it is a full paragraph), and try to integrate the reference into the paragraph instead of only at the end. One other incorrect citation is in Genomic and proteomic features with a link part way through the second point.
Another section to re-examine is the synonyms. There are quite a few for this fungus, but it is good to double check and reference Mycobank. I found Dactylellina haptotyla to be discovered in 1999 not 1985, and Dactylellina candidum found in 2006 not on your list. It may also help to have a history section to go over why there are multiple names for the fungus more in-depth. As well, it would make it easier to keep track of the synonyms if you sort the names in order of discovery.
I did notice a spelling error for the first time you mentioned the fungus, with an e instead of y.
It is good that you have used a wide variety of sources for your article, but many of the sources are used for one point made while 2 sources are used for the most points. It may be best to use other sources, such as the ones mentioned in Week 3 on the Wiki Education page. Kirk P.M. et al. (eds) 2011. Ainsworth & Bisby's Dictionary of the Fungi, 10th ed. Wallingford, UK: CABI International may help with your research.
My recommendation going forward is to expand on different aspects of the fungi. You have quite a lot of information on the morphology and physiology of the fungi, but not very much on the environment or any pathogenic characteristics for humans or other species. Try to narrow down on the type of environment the fungus is found in and what makes it successful in that type of environment. You may also want to consider a new section title for Genomic and proteomic features, and instead call it Genetics to keep the title simple. It may also help to format your article in sentences instead of points to help flow through the information instead of simply stating it. AlainaBallantyne (talk) 01:57, 28 October 2016 (UTC)
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[edit]Hi Zoensy,
As we discussed in tutorial you should edit how you source the synonyms with the authority name instead of the journal name. You could also try to find out the etymology of the species name of the fungus. There are minor grammar/typos errors throughout the article so a quick check for those would be ideal. For example “is also consider as predatory” to “is also considered as a predatory”.
You mention that the nematode is being used as a food source but maybe you could elaborate what nutrients the fungi is getting from it specifically. Is it specifically a nitrogen or carbon source? Does this fungi always act as a predator of nematodes – for example the A. oligospora another nematode trapping fungi only acts as a predator in low nitrogen environments.
A paper you could use is “Metabolites from nematophagous fungi and nematicidal natural products from fungi as an alternative for biological control. Part I: metabolites from nematophagous ascomycetes” by Thomas Degenkolb & Andreas Vilcinskas. From what I understand lineolic acid isn’t inherently nematocidal but that the amount of lineolic acid found in the fungi is. The paper mentions a dose of 5-10 μg/ml of linoleic acid is required for it to be lethal for a C. elegans which is several times higher than 0.1 μg/ml for ivermectin.
As recommended earlier try to find some industrial or medical details of interest to try and link the fungus back to humans. Plant parasitic nematodes are a huge financial burden in the United States as mentioned in the above paper. Perhaps that would be a good jumping off point. Overall good outline, well done. Lantsford (talk) 21:40, 28 October 2016 (UTC)