Wikipedia:Cleanup Taskforce/Desire (album)
The following was posted when the article was listed:
- User "LionKing"'s countless changes to content regarding the song "Hurricane" has made a mess of the article. He's free to write whatever he wants, but his changes are often poorly written.
Section one has 2 paragraphs about particular songs that are documented lower down in the songs section. The material should be merged into the songs sections; but a brief summary about how the songs were an eclectic mix and how there was controversy over some of them should be left near the top (in my opinion). (I already merged the paragraph on Sara from near the top with the one under songs about this song). RJFJR 00:49, 20 February 2006 (UTC)
There's some awkward phrasing too and a few run-on sentences. I'd clean it up just to make it easier to read. The Hurricane material seems pretty dense, and both Rubin Carter and the song have their own entries; you should consider moving some material into those articles, at least the specifics of the case, otherwise too much of the article is focused on Rubin Carter and not the album. L1759 02:57, 20 February 2006 (UTC)
Added to User:Dybeck/Desk RJFJR 00:58, 20 February 2006 (UTC)
I've cleaned up for style a bit. I think the next steps are to:
1) Move a large proportion of the 'Hurricane' section to Hurricane (song) or Rubin Carter (done)
2) Consider whether the sections of dialogue are appropriate. I like them - they include pertinent information - but I think there could be better ways to present. (done)
2a) Also, are they verifiable?
3) Consider combining parts of the 'Outtakes' section and such with the 'Recording sessions' section
4) Deal with the arguments raised on the discussion page and see if we can't find a version with which we're all happy
5) Proof-read and make final formatting changes
-- 6) Tidy up changes to Hurricane (song) and Rubin Carter
Also, I haven't factchecked much of this at all (except one instance where the article contradicted itself). I've not deleted any accurate NPOV information.
Any comments or suggestions before I carry on with this - please feel free to post them here. Dybeck 02:14, 21 February 2006 (UTC)
With regards to #2, if you google the sources given, you can verify the quotes. Some of the other quotes can be found in various books on Dylan, particularly Clinton Heylin's - it's easier to look up these quotes in currently available books because the original articles were published in magazines that are now defunct. L1759 12:27, 21 February 2006 (UTC)