Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Aquinas College, Perth/archive2

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 04:34, 30 March 2007.

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Aquinas College, Perth

previous FAC

This article has been listed as a GA for a decent time, if a former FAC (when it was assesed at B-Class), it has since undergone an amazing transformation. Please vote below Twenty Years 16:26, 24 March 2007 (UTC)

• Oppose - 1a. The prose needs work. Here are a few examples from the lead of why the whole text needs copy-editing by someone who's unfamiliar with it:
  • "The Christian Brothers opened their first school in Western Australia on 31 January 1894 on the corner of St Georges Terrace and Victoria Avenue in Perth, naming it Christian Brothers College Perth, although it was commonly referred to as CBC Terrace[c] in reference to the school being located on St George's Terrace." Long snake needs chopping up; the last clause is ungrammatical.
  • "... boarding students.[8] The first boarding students ..." Audit for such close repetitions.
  • "The accommodation at the site was very limited and as early as 1917, headmaster Br. Paul Nunan saw the necessity of acquiring a property away from the city center to reside the whole school." Try to avoid "very". Is the marked expression "as early as" necessary here? "Saw the necessity of" is a little awkward. Australian spelling PLEASE. Tony 09:08, 27 March 2007 (UTC)

• Oppose Masses of refs to unverifiable sources such as the Aquinas College student diary. I suggest that this be rectified. It has only been GA for under three weeks, and the GA reviewer left reservations despite passing it on the article talk page - have those been addressed? DanielT5 13:01, 27 March 2007 (UTC)
• Oppose, thought I'd chip in since it was I who promoted it to GA only seventeen days ago. My concern from that promotion stands. Also, not imperative for GA's is a nice, consistent ref format, obviously it's not going to get through in its current state. -- PhoenixTwo 02:06, 28 March 2007 (UTC)

The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.