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Black-breasted buttonquail[edit]
This article is about one of the rarest birds I've been lucky enough to see. Scoured sources. Got a thorough GA review. I think it is within striking distance of FA-hood. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 09:25, 22 April 2022 (UTC)
- Image review—pass What map of Australia did you use to create File:Blackbreastedbuttonquailmap.png? Depending on the license it may require attribution. (t · c) buidhe 23:51, 22 April 2022 (UTC)
Comments Support from WA8MTWAYC[edit]
- "The smaller male measures up to 18 cm (7.1 in)" ==> what's the length of the females?
- Under Synonyms in the infobox, maybe you can put the publishing year (of the scientific name) behind the authors' names (if that's available)?
- "Its underparts are dark grey" ==> this sentence is very short and can better be merged with another.
- "thickets.[9] and mature" ==> thickets,[9] and mature
- "reports of young" ==> reports of Young
- Quail, Queensland, Fraser Island, Inskip Point can/should be wiki-linked earlier in the article.
- That's all I have. Nice work. WA8MTWAYC (talk) 11:14, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
AK
- Disclaimer: I haven't checked references and will be claiming credit at the Wikicup.
- You could add some info about the bird's feeding and breeding habits in the lead.
- Under Synonyms in the infobox, maybe you can put the publishing year (of the scientific name) behind the authors' names (if that's available)?
- Mention that the lead image shows a male bird.
- Found this on Flickr, might be useful in the description section.
- "The female measures up to 19 cm (7.5 in) in length, while the smaller male reaches 18 cm (7.1 in)" The specific sex-wise lengths aren't given in the body, just a generic "length varies from 17–19 cm". In fact, Madge and McGowan (which cites that part) doesn't seem to give sex-wise length at all.
- Helm would be a better ref for the etymology and also gives it for the genus name.
- Any cladogram for the species?
- IOC should be IOU?
- "mur'rindum" should be italicized.
- "of predominantly marbled black...brown" is clunky and an awkward read, perhaps "predominantly marbled black...brown in color" or similar would be better.
- "grey gill" What's a gill (in birds)?
- "770–1200 mm (30–48 in)" → Put in a convert template instead of manual conversions.
- −2°C needs a convert template.
- No vocalisations section? McGowan and Madge mentions a fair bit about them.
- Images need alt text.
- That's what I got. AryKun (talk) 12:57, 25 April 2022 (UTC)
- Support on the basis of prose from me. AryKun (talk) 12:38, 5 May 2022 (UTC)
Support from Gog the Mild[edit]
Recusing to review.
- "the female is larger and more distinctively coloured than the male, with a distinctive black head". Optional: can anything be done about the "distinctively ... distinctive" repetition?
- The male and female descriptions are in the same paragraph, but the juvenile description is split off into a single-sentence paragraph. Is there a reason?
- "there were fears that they had suffered predation". I am unsure what this is saying. Is it known if the fears were justified? Does the past tense suggest that this is no longer feared?
- "its habitat is fragmented." Link to Habitat fragmentation.
- "dry rainforest". Any chance of an explanation for the lay reader of this oxymoronic term?
- "It is the only buttonquail found in rainforest and dune scrub systems." The dune scrub habitat seems a bit of a throw away. Could this not be (explicitly) mentioned earlier.
- "indicate this is restricted from October to March". Should this be 'indicate this is restricted to from October to March'? (Or 'to between October and March (inclusive)'.)
- "at any time of year, suggesting opportune breeding can take place at any time." "at any time ... at any time."
- "hence this may be related to". I am a little unsure what "this" is.
- Rereading and knowing in advance what is meant, it still (really) isn't clear (to me) that "this" is breeding. It is possible that you are trying to cram too much into the one sentence?
- Crystal clear IMO.
- "establishes a territory while the males often form small territories within." Either "while" → 'which' or add 'it' to the end.
- Link Pellet (ornithology).
- "though it might have been an artefact"> Perhaps "it" → 'this'?
- References: There seems to be inconsistency as to whether publisher locations are included.
- "the Commonwealth". I suspect that many readers will not know which commonwealth is intended, or assume one other than that which is.
- I don't think "Queensland" and "New South Wales" need to be in italic.
- "reducing threats to the bird and improving their habitat to ensure survival". Singular at first mention and plural at second. ("the ... their")
Wonderful stuff. Gog the Mild (talk) 14:50, 25 April 2022 (UTC)
- Just the one minor issue left, above. Gog the Mild (talk) 16:48, 6 May 2022 (UTC)
Source review by Mike Christie[edit]
Footnote numbers refer to this version.
- You're inconsistent about including publisher locations in book sources. [4] and [5] have locations; none of the others do: [6], [9], [12], [13], [15], [17], [24], [26].
- For [20], the archive link takes me to a page without the relevant information; if I can reach the right page by searching using the form on that page, I'd suggest adding a "loc=" parameter so the reader knows how to find the source.
Sources are reliable; there are old sources but they're used appropriately. No other formatting errors. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 11:28, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
Pass. Looks good. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:57, 6 May 2022 (UTC)
- Closing note: This candidate has been promoted, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Hog Farm Talk 15:16, 18 May 2022 (UTC)
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