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The article was not promoted by Karanacs 13:25, 8 June 2010 [1].

RKO Pictures[edit]

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Nominator(s): DCGeist (talk) 18:53, 21 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The coolest of the classic Hollywood studios? The most tragic? Is there a difference? (N.B.: One intentional dab link—"WOR TV and radio stations".)—DCGeist (talk) 18:53, 21 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comment—no dead external links, no dab links except the intentional one. Ucucha 19:09, 21 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • What is the point of an intentional dab?
The link to the disambiguation page is the most efficient way of informing the reader about the two radio stations and TV station. No article encompasses all three or even two.—DCGeist (talk) 23:23, 22 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Lead. Think it should be was a...since it is no longer in existence in the same form.
It is a film production and distribution company that possesses the name and all identity rights of the film production and distribution company founded in 1929. In its earlier form, it was one of the Big Five studios of Hollywood's Golden Age.—DCGeist (talk) 23:23, 22 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    • the second sentence is very convoluted. Can you tweak that so it is more easily read?
Please specify the point of confusion.—DCGeist (talk) 23:23, 22 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    • celebrated for its musicals.... then you go into a sentence with Katherine Hepburn, Mitchum, etc. There should be some kind of transition...Although ...celebrated for its musicals, it also offered an impressive array of comedies and dramas. .... Innovative horror, etc.
Segue phrase added.—DCGeist (talk) 23:23, 22 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    • two of the most famous films in motion picture history were produced at the studio.... convoluted. The studio produced two of the most famous ....
Done.—DCGeist (talk) 23:23, 22 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    • when did HH take it over? in later years? isn't there a date, or did Hughes keep that a secret too? Again, sentence is awkward as well. Oh, I understand. you're saying Hughes and eventually General Tire. Well, that took me three reads to figure it out. Sooooooo.....
Edited.—DCGeist (talk) 23:23, 22 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Okay, but interesting article, and I will read on, leaving you comments tomorrow. Auntieruth55 (talk) 22:50, 22 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Sources: Is L'Universale—Cinema, vol. 2: K–Z (2004) an English language source? Otherwise, all sources look good, no further issues. Brianboulton (talk) 23:26, 22 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • L'Universale—Cinema is an Italian-language source of information not available in any high-quality English-language source identified to date.—DCGeist (talk) 23:31, 22 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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