Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/The Dark Side of the Moon/archive1

The Dark Side of the Moon

Self-nomination. It's simple really, in my opinion, this is the greatest album of all time. It meets the criteria required, is well written and factual. It should be a featured article. Anyone reading this has almost definitly heard this album, and im sure, therefore, agrees with me.

Gdkh 00:19, 27 October 2006 (UTC)

Object: The "Miscellanea" section is too huge. It should be integrated with the rest of the article, and most if not all statements should have sources indicated. That will make the prose more "brilliant". The "Concept" section has no inline cites. The notes given should be done in any way other than just displaying the url; giving them titles so they look nicer. The lengthy quote in the "Quotes" section should be cited because otherwise it is too hard to tell if it is true. There is a proposal to merge it with Dark Side of the Rainbow. Any article with a merger proposal is unstable. The charts are a but sparse. While the album was important in North America it would be better to have album charts from elsewhere as well. In the "Voices" section there is a {{fact}} tag.

This article is much better than those of some other albums, but it is not quite there yet. By closing this nomination and sending this to peer review you will be able to improve it further. Miss Madeline | Talk to Madeline 00:37, 27 October 2006 (UTC)

• Object The article has very few inline citations considering its length. I also see a rather large number of album covers, all of which without a fair use rationale. While the main album cover is necessary, without discussion about the covers directly, the alternate covers are not adding anything to the article and therefore don't meet the fair use criteria, but I could be wrong. Jay32183 00:59, 27 October 2006 (UTC)
• Object Unfortunately the article is not ready. A section dedicated to a quote(s) belongs in Wikiquotes. Some redundacy: ex. "Perhaps". WP:AVTRIV. Insufficient references. Rename "Sucess" to "Reception", more neutral. - Tutmosis 01:25, 27 October 2006 (UTC)
• Object Good article, but not ready for FA yet. Though obvously comprehensive, it still needs some finishing up to take it over the line:

• The lead gives little context and assumes the reader is already familar with the subject. There's no mention of the cultural significance of the album, beyond it's Billboard placing. Perhalps some of the 'Reception' section could be relocated. Also it might be worth mentioning where the Floyd were in their career at that point, and give a brief note on the inter band tensions that surrounded the album's recording, maybe even in a seperate 'Context' section. Also, this is a significant 'drug' album ?
• 'explores the nature of the human experience' is too bold, as least should be rephrased along the lines of 'explores aspects'. We humans have been through a lot, after all.
• The album is referred to as 'it' five times in the lead - best solution is to refer to it as 'Dark Side' / 'it' in every second instance.
• There are a number of redundancies - 'that also incorporate', 'Another novelty', 'also perfected' etc. 'However' in the second para is unnecessary, the following sentence is not logically connected to the preceeding.
• Some of the phrasing could do with polish, eg:

- the encroachment of old age and death (should be: 'old age, death', - these are two diff things, (& drop 'encroachment'))

- 'not just delivered with words' 'not just' sounds like a plead.

• Some original research, eg:

- 'flippantly endorse greed for ironic effect'

- 'the insanity of warfare', etc

• 'Miscellanea' should be intergrated per Miss Madeline.

Sorry Gdkh if I'm coming down too hard - I did enjoy reading the article, but articles often improve sharply during FAC, and I think with a little copy editing and tweaking, this could be a strong candidate. - Coil00 01:07, 28 October 2006 (UTC)

• Object and refer to peer review. Few inline citations; prose in concept section reads like a high school paper and then the Miscellanea section includes things like this: Dark Side of the Moon was the first Pink Floyd album to have a custom picture label depicting a blue prism with black background with the credits in grey lettering but the US edition's lettering was in white.. Far too much in Miscellanea that could be included elsewhere in the article. Daniel Case 04:22, 30 October 2006 (UTC)