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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 17:04, 10 June 2007.

The Price Is Right (US game show)[edit]

This may get main-page visibility when Bob Barker retires. Perhaps a bit ambitious to reach FA before his retirement date of June 15, but any work up to then would certainly be beneficial. Please refer to the section on the quality of references on the article's talk page. Many thanks!—Twigboy 15:06, 1 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

  • In 2000, the senior employees of the modeling staff were fired, allegedly for contributing damaging testimony against Barker and the show in court.[16] The program has used a rotating set of models since 2002. - uh? What testimony? What case? Titoxd(?!? - cool stuff) 22:56, 1 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Response. Without getting too detailed in this context, I have revised it to the following: Pennington and Bradley were fired from the program in 2000, allegedly for testifying on behalf of Hallstrom in a wrongful-termination lawsuit against Barker and the show.[16] Rather than have a cast of permanent models, the producers transitioned to a rotating set of models. —Twigboy 02:26, 2 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose. Article unfortunately needs lots of work to meet the criteria:

  • Article needs a deep copyedit. The language is clunky, the text is not clear in places, and the grammar needs improvement. It would be best if you could find an editor experienced with copyediting to make a once-through. If you want to attempt it yourself, User:Tony1/How_to_satisfy_Criterion_1a is a good place to start. Here are six proposed changes to show you what I'm thinking about:
  • "largely centering" -> "centering"
  • "The show is well-known[2][3] for its signature line of "Come on down!" which the announcer implores new contestants to do when their names are called." -> "The show is well-known for its signature line, "Come on down!", which is an order given by the announcer to new contestants when their names are called."
  • "Contestants' Row is the head-on competitive area of the show where the four contestants bid on an offered prize." - > "In Contestants' Row, four chosen contestants bid against each other for a single prize."
  • "In the final round of the program, the two contestants who won their Showcase Showdowns compete for a Showcase, a large set of prizes. The prizes tend to be themed, and a small pantomime story often relates the prizes in at least one of the two packages." - Clarity. Which two packages? Is a Showcase a package? Does a Showcase contain packages? Please explain. If I had to guess, I'd reword the second sentence like this: "The prizes in each Showcase tend to follow a theme, and often short pantomimes are given <by whom?> to make this clear."
  • "If a contestant succeeds at underbidding his showcase; bidding $250 or less[9] away from the price of his showcase; and having a closer bid than his opponent, that contestant is awarded both showcases." -> "If a contestant underbids his Showcase by less than $250, and if his bid is closer than his opponent's, then that contestant is awarded both Showcases."
  • "As well as hosting the program, Barker is also credited as the executive producer of the show." -> "In addition to being its host, Barker is the show's executive producer." "Credited" is not necessary unless there is some doubt that he is actually the executive producer.
  • Many unsourced statements need sourcing. For example, "Two well-known strategies for Contestants' Row are bidding" - well-known according to whom? "This is the only part of the program where a contestant plays alone.." - there are lots of statements here explaining the structure and rules of the program that you should be able to cite to reliable third-party sources. If you go through the article and cite every paragraph that currently doesn't end in a footnote (after reformatting per other comments), you can fix this problem.
  • Several copyrighted images lack fair-use rationales.
  • Lead is just too small for this article; please see WP:LEAD for tips on what it should cover.
  • There are many paragraphs in this article that are too short. Please merge single/double sentence paragraphs into surrounding text.
  • A number of sections are also too short. Why is "Broadcast history" empty, for example? "Computer games" and "Live casino game" are tiny. As a rule of thumb, I'd say that the TOC is about twice as large as it should be for an article of this size.
  • Why is the infobox titled "The (New) Price Is Right" instead of "The Price Is Right"?
  • Put ref tags after punctuation per WP:CITE.
  • Shouldn't punctuate sentence fragments in double quotes, per WP:PUNC.
  • Please format currency appropriately per WP:$.
  • Reference #17 is empty.
  • Would suggest formating the References section as two instead of three columns, it just looks too squeezed.

- Merzbow 06:47, 7 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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