Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Turkey Vulture

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted 04:25, 4 November 2007.

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Turkey Vulture

Self-nomination: I am nominating this article for featured article because I feel that it is comprehensive, well-referenced, and meets FA criteria. heyjude. 23:43, 28 October 2007 (UTC)

• Support Comments - lookin' good. A couple of things:

Left a cite tag, sorry but should be dead easy to ref and is a pretty important note. I gotta sleep in a minute.

::horaltic? - needs some sort of explanation on wiktionary link or something.

::Oh yeah, and the other cite tags, needless to say. More later. cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:52, 29 October 2007 (UTC)

• Support I gave the article a copyedit, but other than a bit of now-fixed grammer I couldn't find anything to really pick at. If you want something to do, you may want to look at inserting some new images into the article from the Commons and reformatting them. Also, does the picture in the taxobox really need a description? Other than that, great job Jude! Rufous-crowned Sparrow 00:15, 30 October 2007 (UTC)
  • Thanks! --heyjude. 17:19, 31 October 2007 (UTC)

Pass & support

• On the basis that it's better than most articles here. Leranedo 09:43, 30 October 2007 (UTC)

• Support Great article. I'd like to see it on the main page. I would like to see syrinx briefly explained in the lead, though. It's not term used everyday speech. It would be a shame if it scared away a reader. --Elliskev 14:49, 31 October 2007 (UTC)
  • I added an explanation for the term syrinx. Thanks for your support! Cheers, heyjude. 17:19, 31 October 2007 (UTC)
• Comment: You might try reworking the lead a little to make it sound less like a school report. Right now, too many sentences start "it is..." "it has..." "it does..." Try varying the sentence structure a bit; it will make for a more inviting lead! :) This could be as simple as moving a phrase (e.g. "In flight, it flaps its wings very infrequently" rather than "It flaps its wings very infrequently in flight). MeegsC | Talk 08:32, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the suggestion. I've changed the structure of several sentences in the intro, and I agree that it makes it much more interesting. Cheers, heyjude. 20:57, 1 November 2007 (UTC)

That's a good start! Would I step on your toes if I tweaked it a little more? MeegsC | Talk 21:22, 1 November 2007 (UTC)

Not at all, feel free!heyjude. 21:45, 1 November 2007 (UTC)

• Another comment. Though the species ranges across two hemispheres, it appears that some of the breeding information is correct only for the northern hemisphere; I have a hard time believing the birds in southern South America would be breeding April-June, in the middle of the winter! :) Do you have any references you can check for that? MeegsC | Talk 23:07, 1 November 2007 (UTC)

• Oppose. Single subsections are unsightly. The logic is this: If you don't have more than one subsection, it doesn't make sense to make a section for it. So either make a section with two subsections, or one or two sections, without subsections. Thanks. 82.71.48.158 15:23, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
  •  Done

• Support Great job. I'd like to see some of the subspecies broken out in future articles!--Mike Searson 00:20, 2 November 2007 (UTC)

The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.