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The list was promoted by Dabomb87 23:04, 20 July 2010 [1].

2006 boys high school basketball All-Americans[edit]

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Nominator(s): TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:06, 23 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured list because it is a notable list deserving of recognition as a WP:FL. TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:06, 23 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose Comments from KV5
  • The lead still needs a copyedit. I've spotted at least one sentence fragment and some punctuation/grammar issues. I'll see if I can get to it at some point today. — KV5 • Talk • 14:48, 8 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from KV5
  • Lead should be expanded. It seems quite short.
    • I don't know how much is relevant. I could state that a high number of players make it to the NBA or something, but I don't know much else to add.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:24, 23 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
      • Players who were chosen by all four groups? You haven't talked at all about the players themselves in the lead, and they are the subjects of the list.
  • This article isn't stable yet. It shouldn't be nominated until all players have exhausted their eligibility or declared that they are not becoming professionals
  • The notes column is empty.
  • What do the headers mean?
  • The table is completely unreferenced at this time.
  • Players who were not/are not being drafted should sort at the bottom when the draft column sorts, not at the top.
    • I was hoping you list guys might be able to help me correct this sorting issue.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 01:52, 24 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
      • Set sortkeys, using {{sort}}, on the "N/A" and "TBD" cells. — KV5 • Talk • 22:24, 5 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
        • I have tried to resolve this with your suggestion. Some of the numbers are still not sorting correctly.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:54, 7 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
          • I used a set of hard codes to force the sorting.
  • All blank cells need centered em-dashes.
  • What are the "???" for? It's not on the key.
  • Is the "Notes" column really necessary if there are only two players with awards? Perhaps those could be put in footnotes instead.
  • Some players who played for two schools have slashes, and other have commas. Be consistent.
  • I'm not sold on the structure of the lead. Right now, it seems kind of jumbled, and seems to be structured starting very specifically at the beginning and expanding to general at the bottom. More general information should be at the beginning of the lead to introduce the topic and then it should continue to more specific information later in the lead. The bold in the first sentence seems forced. This could be changed, because the bold in the first line is not completely necessary.
    • I have changed the order of paragraphs in the WP:LEAD and made a new section.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:32, 7 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
      • I don't think you need the other level two header. It unnecessarily breaks the lead. However, the first sentence of the second paragraph, which should no longer be bolded, is a very awkward read. "2006 high school boys basketball All-Americans are boys high school basketball players who were selected to major national All-American teams" says the same thing twice. Perhaps a re-write would be helpful. — KV5 • Talk • 12:00, 7 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
        • I have revised the text, rearranged it and moved the page. With the rearranged text, the LEAD only has general content that could be used in the article for each year this list is created.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 13:34, 7 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

In short, WP:FLC is not peer review. This list is not complete. — KV5 • Talk • 17:11, 23 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hope these additional comments help. — KV5 • Talk • 18:45, 23 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • What are "Jordan Brand players"?
    • I added a link.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:40, 7 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
      • It might be better, instead of just linking Jordan's name, to link "Jordan Brand" itself to the appropriate section of his article that talks about the brand. It brings a lot more context that way. — KV5 • Talk • 12:00, 7 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment - I think it would be useful to state if these players played for a college team and for which college team, but that is just a suggestion. Remember (talk) 16:58, 28 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Support - looks good to me. Remember (talk) 23:24, 5 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from Giants2008 (27 and counting) 19:06, 5 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Comments –
  • "A team of 24 McDonald's All-Americans was selected. Jordan Brand selected 21 players. The USA Today All-USA prep basketball team included 15 players. This list includes the 40 Parade All-Americans." This group of sentences has no flow when read consecutively. Fortunately, improving the readability won't be difficult. The first three sentences are short, and could all be combined into one; this could be followed by "This list also includes...".
  • Parade should be in italics as a printed publication. It isn't in the lead, though it is in the references.
  • All-American linked twice in the lead.
  • "the following players were selected by to all four lists". Remove "by".
  • All-American Teams. First, decapitalize Teams in the section heading.
  • Remove comma in "For teams, where no such enumeration exists...".
  • In the table, there's a blank row for Alex Stepheson. What is this intended to mean?
    • I have to figure out when his eligibility expires. He was a late addition to the table. It was suggested that I add a collegiate affiliation column by someone above. Do you think I should do so. If I do then when I find all that information, I will likely figure out a bit about Stepheson.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:15, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Spell out the publisher of reference 6 (NCAA). Giants2008 (27 and counting) 21:41, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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Waiting on KV5's response, if any, to his group of comments. Giants2008 (27 and counting) 00:03, 8 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, since KV5 seems content, I'll support the list. Giants2008 (27 and counting) 21:03, 9 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I added the NCAA Most outstanding player to the notes section for Wayne Ellington before I realized that the chart wasn't really listing individual college awards. Should this chart include these awards, and if so, which ones? Remember (talk) 13:16, 7 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Tony, has this been issue been resolved? Dabomb87 (talk) 17:11, 10 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
It seems to be a non-issue.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:42, 10 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 14:15, 14 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • I don't think we need to link "athlete".
  • Nor media.
  • Last couple of sentences of first para don't flow well for me. You talk about first ever All-American team in one but then flow into the next sentence where positions suddenly become important.
  • Title has no apostrophe while this sentence "...boys' high school basketball players" does, is there a difference?
  • "to compete in a basketball game" you've already said they're basketball teams.. is this really necessary?
  • I'd look to link "underclassmen" - this isn't a term that non-US (i.e. me) folks are familiar with.
  • "(first, second, etc.). " does the WP:MOS like .).?
  • Perhaps I missed it but you don't explicitly link McDonalds in the lead.
    • Second sentence of second paragraph.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:36, 12 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
      • "Both the McDonald's All-American team selection and the Jordan Brand All-American team selection have associated all-star games held in conjunction with them, in which the players are divided into two teams to compete in a basketball game" no explicit link to McDonalds. Just a link to the McD AA team. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:38, 12 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
        • That is the proper link. The restaurant is not so relevant to this article, IMO. Why do you think we need the restaurant in this article?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:42, 12 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
          • Just want to be sure that if you reference the "restaurant" then there's an actual unique link somewhere in the list. The Rambling Man (talk) 21:07, 12 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • "by the time they have exhausted their collegiate eligibility" what does that mean to a non-expert?
  • En-dash in the parade column means what? And should it sort above 1?
  • In fact, Parade and USAT don't sort correctly in Safari. They have four sort configurations, presumably due to the en/em-dash.
  • Ref 3 has a double ..
  • Same for ref 59.

The Rambling Man (talk) 18:43, 12 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Truco
Comments
  • My main problem is that the lead doesn't flow with me. Its all over the place, its goes from explaining the year 2006's selections but it really doesn't give a background to the selections and if it does, its located too late in the lead. I recommend you give the reader a background to the selections, the teams that there are in the selection process, and other etc. information that is needed. So basically, like move the information regarding the history/background of the selectors/selecting process to come first before the information about the 2006 event.
  • In addition, add some transitions in the lead, like instead of "McDonald's named blah blah" why not "For the 2006 selections, McDonald's selected blah blah".
  • "In the table below, each column represents an All-American team." -- this is a bit misleading since not every column is about the team, its more about the players.
  • Ref 50, needs a publisher, not a URL.
  • The publisher for the Naismith awards needs to be either capitalized and/or reevaluated to being published by the Atlanta Sports Council or Atlanta Tip Off Club.
  • "— - player not named to any team by that selector" - probably change that dash to the other types of dash you have for the rest of the key.
  • You can add a <br> to the reference in the "Draft" column so you don't have to stretch that column out.--Truco 503 01:46, 17 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support -- Issues resolved; meets WP:WIAFL. Good work!--Truco 503 15:40, 18 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]


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