Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/List of World Heritage Sites in Egypt/archive1

List of World Heritage Sites in Egypt

Featured list candidates/List of World Heritage Sites in Egypt/archive1

Nominator(s): Tone 06:35, 30 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Pharaohs! Pyramids! And ... ancient whales, wow! Egypt has 7 WHS and a series of tentative sites. Standard style. The nomination for Argentina is already seeing support so I am adding a second nomination. Tone 06:35, 30 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Alavense

"The latter is also the only natural site in Egypt, the other sites are listed for their cultural properties" --> "The latter is also the only natural site in Egypt, the other sites being listed for their cultural properties"
Is the capitalisation really needed in "Ruins of town of Elephantine" and "Stone quarries and Unfinished obelisk"?
"around the tomb of Menas of Alexandria who died in 296" - A comma is missing.
No need for the capital c in "Classical antiquity".
"Mount Horeb - the place where" - Use {{endash}}.
"the latter has been listed as a World Heritage Site in 2002" - That one should also by preceded by an {{endash}}.
"It was first used by Sneferu of the Fourth Dynasty who constructed the Bent Pyramid" - A comma mising before "who".
"and statues.|"
In "The monasteries of the Arab Desert and Wadi Natrun", the description reads a bit convoluted. Maybe something along the lines of "Other monasteries include those of Saint Paul the Anchorite, Saint Pishoy" and so on?
Shouldn't it be "a 30-inch reflecting telescope"?
The references are used not only for the description, but also for the other columns, so I think it would make more sense to have them isolated in another column to the right of the description.

That's all I saw. Thanks for your dedication to the list, Tone. Kind regards. Alavense (talk) 07:19, 30 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed, thanks! As for references, the table is already rather busy, so additional column would make it worse, stylistically. I think it is rather clear for the reader what they refer to. The capitalizations are per source. The rest I've fixed. Tone 07:56, 2 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much. Support. Alavense (talk) 08:27, 2 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

MPGuy2824

"The monuments are: Abu Simbel (commissioned by Ramesses II, relocation pictured), New Amada, New Wadi Sebua, New Kalabsha, the Philae temple complex (on Agilkia Island, from Greco-Roman period), Qubbet el-Hawa (Old and Middle Kingdom Tombs), Ruins of the town of Elephantine, Stone quarries and Unfinished obelisk, the Monastery of St. Simeon, and the Fatimid Cemetery."
"It was a major city during the Islamic Golden Age and beyond," It isn't clear if beyond means before the golden age OR after OR both.
"The main buildings were constructed in".
"stability of the clay-based soils," Also end this sentence with a full stop.
"oldest Christian monastery still in function" to "oldest functioning Christian monastery"
wikilink "oracle temple"
"comprises the Temple of Serabit Khadem"
"military expeditions in both ways" to "military expeditions in both directions"
"Feiran Oasis has" to "The Feiran oasis"
"to the dorcas gazelle" in two places
wikilink "humid periods".
plularize "dugong".
There seems to be a lot of overlap between "Southern and Smaller Oases, the Western Desert" and "Kharga Oasis and the Small Southern Oases", An explanatory note would be good here.
That's all I got. Please ping me when you fix these. -MPGuy2824 (talk) 10:35, 2 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Done, thanks! Great comments. Tone 14:02, 2 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"First sites in Egypt were listed in 1979" => "The first sites in Egypt were listed in 1979"
"The latter is also the only natural site in Egypt" => "The latter is the only natural site in Egypt"
"resulting in threats to structural integrity of the monuments" => "resulting in threats to the structural integrity of the monuments"
"Main monuments date from the period from 1500 to 1000 BCE" => "The main monuments date from the period from 1500 to 1000 BCE"
"Ruins of the town of Elephantine," => "the ruins of the town of Elephantine,"
"Stone quarries and Unfinished obelisk," => "stone quarries and an unfinished obelisk,"
"The latter has been listed as a World Heritage Site in 2002" => "The latter was listed as a World Heritage Site in 2002"
"on a mountain at the height of 2,150 m (7,050 ft)" => "on a mountain at a height of 2,150 m (7,050 ft)"
"The complex contained two basilicas, an oil press, rooms for monks, and was surrounded by defensive walls" > "The complex contained two basilicas, an oil press and rooms for monks, and was surrounded by defensive walls"
"Alexandria was founded in 332 BCE by Alexander the Great and was an important centre of arts and learning in Classical Antiquity," => "Alexandria was founded in 332 BCE by Alexander the Great and was an important centre of arts and learning in classical antiquity,"
"There used to be a large lake in the Antiquity" => "There used to be a large lake in antiquity" -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:20, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed all, thanks! I was not sure about the Nubian monuments capitalizations but since you are the second reviewer that pointed that out, I fixed is as suggested. Tone 08:15, 4 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 09:13, 4 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]