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The list was promoted by PresN via FACBot (talk) 00:26, 24 June 2023 (UTC) [1].[reply]

List of World Heritage Sites in the United States[edit]

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Nominator(s): Tone 08:38, 16 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The US has 24 World Heritage Sites and 19 sites on the tentative list. This time I am nominating a bit longer list, so input will be very welcome to check for typos and grammar. The style is standard for the WHS lists. Tone 08:38, 16 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by RunningTiger123[edit]

Very happy to see this one submitted here, as I've visited several of these sites myself.

  • "while two sites (the Waterton-Glacier International Peace Park (Montana) and Kluane / Wrangell – St. Elias / Glacier Bay / Tatshenshini-Alsek (Alaska))" – consider rewriting without nested parentheses
  • "4000 archaeological sites" → "4,000 archaeological sites" (match comma usage from elsewhere in the article)
  • "more than a half" → "more than half"
  • "reaches the depths" → "reaches depths"
  • "The original wooden steeple used to house the Liberty Bell." – sentence fragment
  • "sea lions, bald eagle, and California brown pelican" – don't mix plural and singular forms
  • "The park is one of the world's largest remaining remnants of the diverse Arcto-Tertiary Geoflora era, it is a refuge of the flora and fauna that survived the Quaternary glaciations." – comma splice
  • "centre" → "center" (occurs three times in prose; use American English)
  • "storey" → "story" (American English)
  • "The mountains are meeting" → "The mountains meet"
  • "world's largest marine protected area" → "the world's largest marine protected area"
  • "another 2000 years" → "another 2,000 years" (consistent commas)
  • "one of symbols" → "one of the symbols"
  • "California Current flows" → "The California Current flows"
  • "the Pacific Plate, is subducted" → "the Pacific Plate is subducted"
  • "the Rio Grande river" → "the Rio Grande" ("Rio" and "river" are redundant)
  • "from the second half of 18th century, are planned cities" → "from the second half of the 18th century are planned cities" (note added word and removed comma)
  • Consider using Template:Efn for notes – they allow the footnote to pop up when the symbol is hovered over, which I think is more convenient for readers.
  • Alt text and sorting look good.

— RunningTiger123 (talk) 19:15, 17 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed, thank you for checking! Not sure about the sentence fragment, "The original wooden steeple used to house the Liberty Bell." -> Before they put it to display, the bell was in the steeple. Tone 14:59, 20 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]
That one's on me; I misread the sentence and how "used" was used. RunningTiger123 (talk) 01:54, 21 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Support – RunningTiger123 (talk) 01:54, 21 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Reywas92[edit]

Also excited to see this one, been to 15 between the listed and nominated sites!

  • World Heritage Convention can be wikilinked (and shouldn't this be done for all these lists?)
  • Please be consistent with cultural heritage and natural heritage sentence structure.
  • "As of 2023," is unnecessary, this is unlikely to become outdated
    • I like it because every now and then (a couple of years) these lists get updated, especially for larger countries such as the US.
      • Right but when a new site is named, we can be reasonably certain that this article will be updated right away. The point of "as of" is to tell the reader, "this might not be presently accurate when you read it", but while hypothetically anything can change, we don't need a disclaimer that adds no value except in the unlikely event another site is designated yet no one is updating Wikipedia any more.
  • "Second Session" should be lowercase
  • "twenty different states" remove "different", it can't be 20 of the same states!
  • Rm comma after Pennsylvania
  • no "the" before Everglades NP
  • "and also functions as a model to understand the ecosystem processes" too close to source
  • "and" before mountain goat
  • "The canyon is..." sentence should have parallel clauses
    • It read fine to me, but please check now.
      • The sentence has two verbs and therefore two clauses, but the first verb is only introducing a list with two items so they need an "and" between them. Or the second verb "reaches" can be removed so it's a proper three item list with all three items in the same format.
  • "Precambrian and Paleozoic portions particularly well exposed and containing rich fossil assemblages" also quite close to source
    • I think this is ok, if I change it too much, it will be clumsy. I am open to suggestions.
  • "The area is home to several mammal, bird, and reptile species," overly wordy, rephrase for conciseness or more meaning
  • The "in Danger" explanations are a bit wordy, that's half the description
    • But this is important, especially because Everglades have been listed more than once.
  • Olympic: "as well as" should be "and"
  • I don't think the paraphrased "that the evolution is taking its separate course" has quite the same meaning as the original, reword the sentence or use a different fact
    • Removed, it pretty much doubles the fact that isolation results in different subspecies and later species.
  • " largest pre-Columbian archaeological site north of Mexico" doesn't mean the same thing as the orginal "the largest pre-Columbian settlement north of Mexico", not sure if this paraphrase is still accurate.
    • This fact is listed later, criterion (iii). Both are correct.
  • "one of the largest remaining remnants of the diverse Arcto-Tertiary geoflora era" another copy-paste
  • "the continuous biological evolution of the natural system" again, just changed "this" in the source to "the", not great
    • Removed.
  • Statue of liberty has "state" typo
  • "has welcomed millions of immigrants" in the source is more appropriate tense than "was welcoming millions of migrants", please rewrite
    • Already fixed by another editor.
  • "glaciers have created" -> "glaciers created"
  • "The altitudes range from 2,000 ft (600 m) to 13,000 ft (4,000 m), resulting in a wide variety of habitats that include diverse flora and fauna" kind of vague, rewrite or remove altogether and put in something more descriptive, it's Yosemite!
    • Removed. I guess I am going too long with some descriptions.
  • "in" -> "on the island"
  • "freedom, nobility, self-determination, and prosperity" copy-pasted
    • It is, but I cannot really use synonyms for those... Open to suggestions. The sentence overall is different, though.
      • I'd remove altogether if you can't write it in Wikipedia's voice, I don't think about self-determination when seeing neo-classical architecture
  • Carlsbad: speleothems links to Speleogenesis instead of speleothem
  • "from the Permian" -> during
  • "of this site" seems unnecessary
  • "blurring of the boundaries between exterior and interior" copy-paste
    • What about now?
  • wikilink petrified trees
  • "allows the paleontologists study" "allow paleontologists to study"
  • "first elevators," "first" unneeded
  • "aesthetics" singular

Reywas92Talk 22:21, 2 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

    • @Reywas92: I'm through, sorry it took me a while! Thanks for checking, great comments! --Tone 20:46, 9 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]
      @Reywas92, did you manage to check this one? :) Tone 21:56, 25 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Less review than we usually go for, but as part of a successful series I'm comfortable with the level of attention this one has gotten. Source review passed, promoted. --PresN 21:33, 23 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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