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2010 Claxton Shield

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I've listed this article for peer review because… The season has finished so there shouldn't be any large content-based changes to the article any more. (Unless I've done something fairly wrong with it.) I'm looking to get this to good article status, but I'll see what happens from here. Thanks,  Afaber012  (talk)  06:50, 25 March 2010 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: This is a good start, and the topic is interesting. However, I think it would be helpful to add a brief history of the competition and an explanation of the name, Claxton Shield, for foreign readers and readers unfamiliar with baseball. Here are some other suggestions.

• I'm not sure about that one: the lead links to the Claxton Shield article which has that info. Also, assuming a summary should be added to this article, logically it should be added to the other 60 or so articles about individual Claxton Shield seasons: that sort of duplication doesn't sound right. But if you insist, I can put something in.  Afaber012  (talk) 

• I find the explanation of the rounds and byes puzzling; I just don't see how this works. If each team plays ten regular-season rounds of three games each, that would be 30 games in total, but each team played just 24 games. That suggests two byes per season per team if the regular season consists of ten rounds. Is there a way to make this more clear? Or, as I suspect, do most teams play just eight rounds; one semi-finalist plays nine rounds, and the two finalists play ten rounds? Would it help to make things more clear by speaking of eight regular-season rounds followed by a two-round tournament?

•  Fixed I thought it was clear, but given what you thought it was, apparently I explained it pretty poorly. I've changed the explanation there, so hopefully it's much clearer now. You might need to re-check it though to make sure.  Afaber012  (talk)  05:29, 8 April 2010 (UTC)

• The "Overview" section lacks sources as does the "Rosters" subsection. A good rule of thumb is to provide at least one source for every paragraph as well as sources for direct quotes, sets of statistics, and any claim that has been challenged or is apt to be challenged.

•  Done I've added refs to both of those sections.  Afaber012  (talk) 

Overview

• It varied from the 2009 Claxton Shield by eliminating the showcase round and making each of the ten rounds a three-game series with one team taking a bye." - I don't think this statement will make sense to non-sports fans. Would it be helpful to briefly explain what is meant by "showcase round"? Should bye be linked? Would it be helpful to explain why a bye was needed? In what round(s) was a bye needed? A bye was clearly needed in first round of the tournament, but perhaps that is not what you are referring to here.
• "In total, it allowed for 24 regular season games per team before playing a championship series similar to the 2009 edition." - A top-to-bottom copyedit would probably catch and fix constructions like this one. "Playing" seems to modify "it" in this sentence, but "it" didn't play any games. Better would be something like "In total, it allowed for 24 regular-season games per team before the championship series, which resembled the 2009 edition."
• "Games were played on a Friday night and a doubleheader on Saturday with the evening game being shortened to seven innings." - "With" doesn't make a very good conjunction. A copyeditor might revise this to say, "Teams played single games on Friday nights and afternoon-evening doubleheaders on Saturdays; evening games were shortened to seven innings from the usual nine."

•  Fixed I removed the reference to the showcase round, and as mentioned above redid the explanation of the season's structure. The specific things you pointed out are gone, but I might've introduced something new that needs to be fixed.  Afaber012  (talk) 

References

• I would remove the ad, "Proudly sponsored by Dominos Pizza", from citation 3.

•  Done  Afaber012  (talk) 

• Wikipedia uses title case even when sources use all caps, as in citations 9, 10, and 11. "NEW SOUTH WALES vs VICTORIA", for example, should be "New South Wales vs Victoria".

•  Done  Afaber012  (talk) 

Other

• The alt text tool in the toolbox at the top of this review page shows that the images need alt text, probably just the "decorative image" adjustment mentioned in the tool explanation. WP:ALT has a more full explanation.

•  Done I've added the "|link=" to all the images: with the exception of the Australian map it's been done through the template that's used to display it.  Afaber012  (talk) 

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 21:20, 6 April 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for the feedback. As you can see, there's one or two things that I've done that I'd love for you to check.  Afaber012  (talk)  05:29, 8 April 2010 (UTC)