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Aaliyah[edit]

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I feel that this article may be able to be taken to WP:FAC, though I would like to get some fresh eyes on the article. It passed its WP:GAN nomination just over a month ago and, seeing as the biography is fairly solid, would like to take it to the next step.

Thanks, — ξxplicit 05:43, 13 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Just a quick skim since I'm a little tired...

  • Much of the article, especially the "life and career" section, seems to have a very insecure citation style. Must every little thing be cited 2 and 3 different times? I guess too much is better than too little, but it just looks...yeah, insecure. Also, lower-numbered references should occur first when two or more are used together. This occurs several times in the article.
    It's not insecure citation, it's just that one source alone can not verify everything in one sentence, hence the addition of multiple references after one sentence. I'll make sure to correct the order of the references. — ξxplicit 20:30, 18 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why is the section on her death a subsection under "life and career?" I realize the section continues with posthumous releases, but that still strikes me as odd.
    This was brought up before on the talk page I believe. Another editor had moved the death subsection after the "life and career" section as a standalone section, which broke the chronology and flow of the article. I'm open to comprises. — ξxplicit 20:30, 18 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Might have more later. Alex finds herself awake at night (Talk · What keeps her up) 06:20, 18 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for giving the article a look. — ξxplicit 20:30, 18 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]