Wikipedia:Peer review/Amenhotep I/archive1

Amenhotep I[edit]

I've been working on this article off and on for about six months, and since it just passed GA, I believe it time to expose it to greater scrutiny. Its major failing is that I alone have written most of the text, and accordingly it may read perfectly fine to me, since I have experience in the field, but it may not make a lot of sense to a layperson, and that is the kind of problem I want to flush out to fix. In general, confusing areas, styalistically awkward places, and big blank spots where you think somthing hasn't been covered enough would be good things to point out. Thanatosimii 05:21, 15 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR _t 22:57, 15 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comments:
- could do with Prince-Governor being stubbed,
- "certain scholars have argued that Amenhotep I may have done this as well." needs a cite after it.
- other than that it looks good, but this isn't at all my area.
- Francis Tyers · 19:26, 25 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- However, sometime in the eight years between Ahmose I's seventeenth regnal year and his death, the his heir... is a bit odd as a phrase. -- Szvest - ^{Wiki me up ®} 10:33, 26 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]