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Andhra Pradesh[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I have updated the article to deal with the restructuring of the districts of the subject of the article in 2022 and also made enhancements since the latest major revision in June 2019. The earlier attempted peer review in 2014 did not have any response.

I would like to use peer review feedback to make the article even better to get to a GA article status.

Thanks, Arjunaraoc (talk) 10:07, 17 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Z1720[edit]

Comments after a quick skim:

The History section devotes a lot more space to recent events than it does to older events. I suggest summarising the information more effectively and moving prose to the History of Andhra Pradesh article, which can go into more detail.
Religion section needs expansion.
The "Family health" section doesn't really talk about family health, with demographic statistics listed instead. I think this should be moved to the general Demographics section.
"Revenue divisions" and "Mandals and village panchayats" need expansion. As someone who does not know about India, I do not know why any of this is important.
Expand the two paragraphs of the "Services" section and remove the headings as they are not needed and cause MOS:OVERSECTION
"Meanwhile, Jagan Mohan Reddy announced that Visakhapatnam would become the new capital when he addressed a meeting on 31 January 2023, relating to an upcoming investment summit." has a "needs update" tag that should be resolved.
In general, be aware of MOS:OVERSECTION. Sections with a short paragraph should be merged.
"Festivals" should be expanded or merged with another section.

Hope this helps. Z1720 (talk) 23:58, 22 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Z1720, Thanks for your review. The review feedback was addressed wide Talk:Andhra_Pradesh#Addressing_Peer_review_feedback during 4-5 Oct 2023. Arjunaraoc (talk) 00:13, 30 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Z1720, The review feedback was addressed. Arjunaraoc (talk) 00:30, 30 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]