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Looking to submit this for GAN soon, but it's hard to find more sources than I already have. There's one or two more that I can probably use to expand the article, but not by very much. I think my best bet is to try to expand Conteh's clinical approach to dealing with Lassa fever in the ward, as Donaldson's book has more information on that subject, and it is of great interest. I believe there are also some additional journal articles and CDC reports etc. that deal with this subject. I've asked WP:MED to help me, so we'll see.

Thanks, Viriditas (talk) 10:44, 11 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: What an amazing and selfless human being he was, and what a tragedy he died. This looks pretty good to me - here are some suggestions for improvement.

  • I doubt this will be a problem at GAN, but I can see this going up for FAC eventually eventually and it might be a problem there. The lead photo File:Aniru Conteh by F. Jacquerioz.jpg was published in a CDC journal, but that does not necessarily mean that it is a free image (PD-US Government). If F. Jacquerioz is a CDC or US gov't employee or was doing work for hire, it is a free photo. If the photographer just allowed his or her photo to be used, then it is not necessarily free. It might help to contact the lead author of the article and ask about this, although I doubt it iwll be an issue at GAN.
  • I also read the ref (current number 2, CDC EID) the lead photo is in and it includes some details that are not in or in one case conflict with the article as written now. For example it says he moved to Freetown as a teen to help support his family, or there are more details about his last illness and death On March 23, fever developed in Dr. Conteh. Despite the administration of intravenous ribavirin, profuse vomiting and diarrhea developed a few days later; these led to hypovolemic shock and cardiac arrest, which necessitated resuscitation. Bleeding and renal failure ensued. Consultations were sought and received from medical experts around the world.[1]
  • The CDC obit article also says "Aniru Conteh is survived by his wife, Sarah, three sons, and two daughters." but the article says "With his wife Sarah, Conteh's family includes four sons and two daughters.[3]" It might be one of his sons died before he did, but this needs to be noted (his Lancet obituary said he had four sons, while his EID obituary said he had three sons) or explained "Conteh and his wife Sarah had four sons and two daughters, he was survived by his wife, three sons and two daughters." or something like that.
  • I couldn't check the Lancet article as registration was required, so the ref should note this
  • The Personal life section is only one short sentence - I was wondering if it could be combined with the Illnes and death section after his death (since it is just his surviving family)? Ref 12 also gives the name of one of his sons and says that the son works for the UN. Not sure this is worth including
  • There are a few places where more context could be provided to the reader - see WP:PCR I think a paragraph or two on Lassa fever (symptoms, cause, progress in humans, even a bit of history) would help the reader understand the dangers COnteh faced earlier. Not sure if a sentence or two on the civil war would help.
  • I looked at 2 refs and found little facts that could be added in each - it might be useful to go back and reread the sources and see if more could be gleaned from them. In particular I agree that it seems as if the Lassa Ward book might have more details (in a book over 200 pages long). Again GAN does not require that an article be comprehensive, but FAC does.
  • Refs should generally be in numerical order, so fix things like Conteh died from renal failure on April 4, 18 days after first becoming infected with the Lassa virus.[10][3]
  • Language is pretty good - thanks for an interesting read and opening my eyes to the story of this brave and selfless human being.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 12:26, 19 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Reply from Viriditas
  • You might be right about Frederique Jacquerioz. She does not appear to have worked with the CDC. I'm going to try and contact her and determine the appropriate licensing, however, she has received NIH funding and works closely with Médecins du Monde, so I doubt the current licensing will be a problem. But, it's always good to confirm.
  • No conflict, his mother died, and he might have tried to support his family by moving to Freetown and sending money home, but I'll try and fix this. There are more details about his death that could be added, but I wasn't entirely convinced that going into the violent detail of a death from Lassa Fever would be appropriate, however, I'll see what I can add.
  • The discrepancy regarding the number of children is noted in a hidden comment, and I have not yet been able to resolve this.
  • I will note the registration need for the Lancet article.
  • Merging the death and illness with the personal life section seems like a good suggestion.
  • Agree with expanding content about the fever and the civil war.
  • I will take another look at the refs and the book.
  • I'll fix the refs.
  • Thanks. Viriditas (talk) 08:57, 5 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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