Wikipedia:Peer review/Ara Canal/archive1

Ara Canal

I've listed this article for peer review because i want to get a more information.

Thanks, Pkh409 (talk) 02:34, 8 December 2015 (UTC)

Comments from White Arabian Filly

• In the infobox, the end point needs double brackets, not single ones.
• The history section needs expansion.
• In the Outline section the reference could be put in the table instead of the header.
• "5million ton" could be changed to "5 million tons".
• Shouldn't "hanyang river" be capitalized?
• "Yellow sea" should be "Yellow Sea".
• "So installing 'rain water pump'" is sort of awkward. The sentence needs to be changed to start with something other than so.
• "suhyang" should be Suhyang.
• "Also in Ara marine center" could be rephrased to start with something other than also.
• The cultural life subsection needs to start with a the.

White Arabian Filly (Neigh) 23:48, 16 December 2015 (UTC)

Comments from Checkingfax

Hi Pkh409. I will go in and make some edits directly, then get back to you with any suggestions. Looks like White Arabian Filly has set a high bar for me to reach. Cheers! {{u|Checkingfax}} {Talk} 04:19, 24 February 2016 (UTC)

Hi Pkh409. Here are some quick suggestions:

• In the Outline of Ara Canal project section, in the table, change: main Canal → Main canal, for consistency and per MoS re: Title Casing and sentence casing.
• Dedicated Controversy sections are deprecated. We are now instructed to weave the controversy throughout the prose of the article (where it is germane to the prose).
• Suhyang should always lead with a Cap S.
• In the Scenic views of Suhyang section there is no need for "scare quotes". Erase them. All of them.
• Same for the Bicycle and Ara Marina subsections: lose the "scare quotes".
• Research Ara Marina to see if it should be: Ara marina.
• In the Gyeongin Ara Culture Festival section, lose the single quote marks around 'Gyeongin Ara Culture Festival'
• Research 'Gyeongin Ara Culture Festival' to see if it should be in Title Case or sentence case.
• After this sentence: The program has changed every year and this year's program as follows. there is nothing really following it.
• It is the largest shopping mall in Ara canal region. is not supported by a reference.
• Since you have more than eight Notes you could invoke a column width by using the {{Reflist|30em}} template and with the 30em column width value.
• I added some Portals at the bottom of the page. If you later expand to having a See also section you could move them up there and covert them to box style by omitting the bar call out from the template.
• I set the datestyle to dmy (DAY/MONTH/YEAR), so use that going forward in the prose and in references.
• Change Note with: and future( → and future (
• I repaired a date error in one of the Notes.
• The article currently has a lot of one-line paragraphs. Expanding those would look and would flow better.
• Use the {{convert}} template to convert all metric units to standard units too. Click on the template linked here to see all the parameters you can use for conversion. Ping me if I can assist with that.
• Here is the diff for my first edit round.
• Here is the diff for my second edit round.
• Here is the diff for my third edit round.

Cheers! {{u|Checkingfax}} {Talk} 05:09, 24 February 2016 (UTC)