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August Strindberg

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I've listed this article for peer review because…I would like to see it reach a higher quality level, and if it doesnt, what the article needs to be get a higher rating.

Thanks, Phaeton23 (talk) 03:49, 31 March 2010 (UTC)

Comments from Maria

This article is certainly important, and one that should be top of the Theatre-related to-do-list. Because so much work is necessary, Peer Review may not be too helpful at this stage of development. I'm afraid it's not ready to go beyond B-class at the moment, so here are a few things to concentrate on:

• First and foremost, the article requires many more additional references from reliable, academic sources. Seeing as how there is a list of such works to pull from under the "Sources" section, that would be a good start. Every paragraph should have at least one citation, although more than one would obviously be better. Cite well and cite often.
• The lead section should be expanded to provide a summary of the article in full, per WP:LEAD.
• The "Legacy" section has only one sentence; with such an influential figure, there should be multiple paragraphs! What was his effect on the Swedish theatre? International theatre? Other playwrights? What about his continuing effect in today's age? His most performed/influential works? Etc, etc.
• The "Writing" section is barely four paragraphs long, with not a citation in sight. Eek! Since this is what Strindberg is known for, his plays should take up a huge part of the article. His writing style, genres, common themes, character development, intricacies -- all of these and more should be discussed at length, considering the subject matter. While some of these details may be present in some form throughout the lengthy biographical section, it is in such a "Writing" section that this information should be concentrated.
• I'm not a fan of galleries, simply because they take up too much space. However, consider cutting down the gallery dedicated to his paintings; 20+ seems like overkill.
• I suggest moving a bulk of Strindberg's bibliography to a separate article (August Strindberg bibliography) and only listing the main works here.
• Kill the "In popular culture" section with fire. A majority of the facts listed are nothing but trivia, and such sections are depreciated at WP:GAC and WP:FAC.

I hope these suggestions are helpful. Like I said, however, this article has a long way to go, but it's a worthy cause! María (habla conmigo) 13:28, 31 March 2010 (UTC)