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Boise homosexuality scandal[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I think it's pretty close to GA status, although I am a bit concerned that it relies pretty heavily on a single source. It's a brand-new article that no one else has looked at so I want another set of eyes on it before making the GA nomination.

Thanks, Otto4711 (talk) 18:08, 2 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Casliber[edit]

(OMG I have relatives in Boise!) hehehe, fascinating topic. I don't have much time but will jot a few style notes. :) Casliber (talk · contribs) 04:54, 9 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

...leading them to quietly halt the investigation - "halt" I always think of as sudden and abrupt (and sorta noisy). I was wondering whether "wind down" or "desist" or something was better. Casliber (talk · contribs) 04:54, 9 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The section Investigation and first arrests starts rather abruptly. I think some background or context-setting might be good. i.e. A few sentences which might mention that Boise was a fairly conservative part of America (I guess ???), and current laws on homosexuality at the time (briefly and succinctly)

More later, have you pinged Moni3? if not I will do so. She will be helpful I am sure. Casliber (talk · contribs) 04:58, 9 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comment - an NPOV tag has been added to the article. There is discussion on the talk page. Anyone who further peer reviews the article, please pay close attention to that issue. Otto4711 (talk)