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Boxer Rebellion

I think the article as it is right now, reads extremely well and it should be on its way to FA! It may need a NPOV brush and a better elaboration of both the chinese and foreign points of view, but overall i think this turkey's roasted! Project2501a 20:20, 7 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

On its way to FA yes, in a sense, but it still needs a lot of work before it gets there. Some of the followings things need to be improved:

Expand the lead. Right now it's just one paragraph and it would help if it was at least two for FA status. My suggestion would be to go a little more in depth as to why the rebellion started. You could also talk about some of the leaders.

In-line citations in large numbers are a must in order for an article to reach FA. Right now this article has two, which is insufficient. For an article of this length, about 30-40 would be appropriate. Try to get some reliable and prestigious sources too (printed material is generally better than internet sites).

There are some major prose issues. I identified several run-on sentences and a variety of grammatical errors. Ask someone to give this a thorough copyedit.UberCryxic 04:54, 8 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]