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British home army in the First World War

Companion article to Territorial Force, this article details the measures undertaken by the UK to defend the country in the event of invasion during the First World War. It's very much a first draft, and will be subject to polishing, including the addition of images. I'm looking for a broad brushstroke peer review to identify any obvious problems or areas for improvement. Particularly concerned about the size of the article, so interested to hear if anyone thinks there's too much detail or whether it strays off-topic anywhere. It's also a complicated, bitty subject, and the few sources available weren't always easy to follow, so interested to hear how well it reads; does it convey the information logically and well, or is it difficult to understand? Thanks. Factotem (talk) 18:44, 28 May 2018 (UTC)

Comments: G'day, nice work, as always. I have a few suggestions: AustralianRupert (talk) 10:23, 2 June 2018 (UTC)

• the first sectence of the lead seems a little complex. I wonder if the estimate of the invading force is really necessary here
• in the lead: "The 14 infantry divisions and 14 mounted brigades...": suggest linking division and brigade here
• the lead doesn't quite summarise what happened post war
• link platoon
• "Field Marshal Sir Sir Henry Wilson": duplicate word "Sir Sir"
• I found this sentence a little awkward: "The government considered the allocation to the associations responsibility for the administration of the VTC a way of maintaining them for possible post-war use"
• "benefits provided by the volunteers to the home defence effort is..." --> "benefits provided by the volunteers to the home defence effort are..."

Thanks. I've fixed all of the above. Factotem (talk) 11:00, 2 June 2018 (UTC)