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Cameroon–Nigeria relations

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I've listed this article for peer review because I want feedback on my article, and a good assessment of the quality/importance for the Africa Project Thanks, PowerkeysPowerkeys (talk) 21:08, 12 December 2009 (UTC)

Comments by Dana boomer

Hello Powerkeys. First, quality/importance are rated by individual projects, not by the peer review process. I would suggest posting on the WikiProject Africa discussion page (or on a designated assessment page if there is one) in order to get an assessment completed. Second, although I'm not really sure where you want to take the article (i.e. simple improvement, GA, FA, etc), I have quite a few suggestions. It looks like a nice start, but there is a lot of work that is needed for, for example, GA status. Here are my suggestions:

• A lead is needed, see WP:Lead for more information. Basically, a lead summarizes the article, without introducing new information. It provides an overview of the article for readers, and the information presented is then re-presented (in different wording) and expanded upon in the body of the article.
• In-line references are needed to back up statistics and potentially controversial information. At the moment, this article seems to focus on the ongoing conflict, which means that the information is very likely to be challenged at some point and needs in line references. See Wikipedia:Inline citation for more information.
• This article deals completely with the relationship in the past less than 20 years, and mostly on work that has been done in the past 10 years or less. More expansion is needed to add information on the history of these two countries before 1993.
• The prose is vague in some places. For example, "For a few years, relations between". How many years? What year range? Also, "relations between Cameroon and Nigeria have been intensified". How have they been intensified? Intensified in a good way or a bad way?
• The The Cameroon-Nigeria Mixed Commission Intentions and Accomplishments sections could be combined into one, as they are both very short sections. Also, the Accomplishments section could probably be better presented as prose, rather than a list, and prose is prefered by WP guidelines.

I hope these suggestions help. I am watchlisting this page, so please feel free to post here with any questions you may have about my above comments. Dana boomer (talk) 00:27, 18 December 2009 (UTC)