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Canning Dam

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I've listed this article for peer review because…

Its really past stub status, would like some tips for improvements (my first article)

Thanks,--Mdavies 965 (talk) 08:18, 25 November 2008 (UTC)

DeepestGreen comments: Before I started this review I did a bit of a copyedit on the lead and the history section. The article would benefit from further copyediting. Briefly, here are some other suggestions for improvement.

• A map locating the dam and the reservoir would be good.
• Perhaps the dam and reservoir could also be put into the context of the other dams in the North Darling Range, as well as in the context of supplying water to Perth.
• History section:

Is there a source for the report that first proposed the dam?(not the actual report but a reference cites it--Mdavies 965 (talk) 08:33, 7 December 2008 (UTC)) What was it about the site that made it so suitable for a dam and reservoir?

I wonder whether the last two paragraphs in this section really belong in the history section.

• Construction section:

More detail on the design of the dam and the geological conditions would be useful, as well as any difficulties that were overcome during its construction.

• Are there any issues with the structure of the dam today? Concrete dams of this type often have problems with an alkali-aggregate

reaction (AAR) that causes expansion and cracking.

• Is the reservoir used as any other kind of amenity? Water sports perhaps?
• Wildlife problems

I think this section needs renaming, as it includes details about excessive nutrients. Perhaps Environmental Issues would be better. [S]tudies of fish and fish habitats... needs a source. This section could also be expanded as it is likely that there will be much more information on this topic. Dams have huge environmental impact on their locality and are often the subject of academic studies.

Well done on your first article, you can certainly remove the stub tag, and I hope these suggestions are of some help. If you need any help please don't hesitate to ask. DeepestGreen[talk] 15:40, 30 November 2008 (UTC)