Wikipedia:Peer review/Chinese Garden MRT station/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I want it to be a GA. Please edit any grammar mistakes, inconsistencies, etc. Note that the fans and platform doors part says "it was installed by [X date]" since there weren't any sources that said when they were actually installed.
Thanks, Imbluey2. Please ping me so that I get notified of your response 11:03, 15 September 2024 (UTC)
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[edit]@Imbluey2 Just a quick look, so not too many comments:
When it opened, the station faced two problems; no direct access to Chinese Garden (despite being next to it) as well as to the station itself from the opposite side where most of its commuters lived.
- simplify a bit, perhaps "When it opened, the station lacked direct access to Chinese Garden despite being next to it, as well as to the opposite side of the road where most of its commuters lived."- User Template:Convert to convert the numerical units so that those using Imperical units can understand as well:
1.3km
-> 1.3 kilometres (0.81 mi) for example. Same for the amount of money using Template:SGDConvert. Perhaps the most prominent feature of the station, the curved roof is based on traditional Chinese architecture.
- Do watch out for WP:PUFFERY, specifically the word "prominent". Also, I would advise against the word "perhaps" since it implies you're guessing that it is (which should not be the case).Specifically, Scott Danielson of Parson Brinckerhoff said that...
- When I first looked at it I didn't know who Scott Danielson was until I read the source. Perhaps change it to -> Designer of the station Scott Danielson of Parson Brinckerhoff said that...
S5A-0043Talk 12:12, 16 September 2024 (UTC)
- Thank you! I've implemented your feedback but I don't really know if the imperial units used are appropriate Imbluey2. Please ping me so that I get notified of your response 12:55, 16 September 2024 (UTC)