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I've listed this article for peer review because... I have tried expanding it as much as I can so far. I have not completed the reviews and touring and aftermath sections (these are WIP however), but for the rest of the article I would like some criticism as to what should be changed, fixed and re-edited; this will be useful as it means I will not have to backtrack to re-editing old sections whilst working on new ones. If anyone has information I have missed or got incorrect, please tell me!!
In short; tell me what is bad and good, so I can fix it.
Thanks, Chchcheckit (talk) 16:30, 16 July 2022 (UTC)
Comments from Z1720
[edit]@Chchcheckit: here are some comments after a quick skim:
- The paragraphs in the background section are quite long. Can they be divided?
- Merge the last two paragraphs in "Singles and music videos"
- Reception should include a paragraph on the critical commentary for this album. What did critics say about this? Use WP:RECEPTION to help structure this.
- "Personnel" and "Use in media" need citations.
Hope this helps. Z1720 (talk) 19:49, 2 October 2022 (UTC)
- Hi, @Z1720; thanks, very useful. Just done the first two of these things plus some editing and stuff. I'll get to 3 and 4 in short time (it's late). Thank you very much. Chchcheckit (talk) 23:34, 2 October 2022 (UTC)